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Do you notice a rose?

This stomach hurts,A whole bottle does that,It gets fat then shrinks,A withered baseball bat,Once covered in blood,That’s a lie it was many,Twice beaten and bruised,That’s a lie that feels empty,A bottle without whisky,Comforting the rich,It is but a nightcap,For some there is a switch,Others have fits,Dieing on empty roads,Pedestrians on the pavement,Eye those empty souls,They do nothing,All blind I suppose,Empathetic psychopaths,Who would notice a wilted rose,But not an angel in tattered clothes,I bleed when I drink,Nobody knows.
— bloke, May 10, 2009

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yenti

yenti

17 years ago

Sadness

Of a lost soul that needs to be seen, there was a saying some place that you never look at a Nuns face.... There is also a way with folks that they avoid some of the realities of others lives by passing them by on the other side of the road, one of the Parbales I believe. I think your write was very good, but as to the man, Angel or what it will happen. Don't pass me by, I am the same as you, I would be you,if I could choose, springs to mind. Yours Ian.T