Undefeated Faith

Well written poem, although, I would like to see at least a little punctuation and this little problem that is so common. Dreams loose to the (I thing you meant.."Dreams lose to the" Otherwise, it read very well and I enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "God made an idiot for practice, then he made a school board." Mark Twain For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

I am so happy you're posting again greek boy!!!! This is a great one, I believe you showed both the original and this one on Facebook. Great poem, even on a second read. I'd like to give you a big hug!!!! Peace N Love Katie

Yay for increasing your vocabulary!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Macho love to yah man XP

all in place love the grit and wit and hopeful ending Paul cool poem you have here fine use of words and context fave line is .." a strand of faith resides in the basement of a lost souls heart.." better and better my freind!!!

Many years ago i wrote a poem about faith, it is what children innately possess, though they don't know it and can't call it by name. In the end we pass through everything with or without faith. Well done, Paul. ~A "The way you make love is the way God will be with you." Rumi

I'm very happy to see you posting a little more frequently. The flow in this write was very well done - it just kind of made its own rhythm. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Atheism is a non-prophet organization" - George Carlin -"Don't sweat the petty things and don't pet the sweaty things" - George Carlin

Hey Paul I really liked reading this from you, it started off kind of tentatively I felt, then it just slipped over the edge & was off. A good write, a good exploration... My feeling about that is that it's all perspective, any of those things can be conjured with our will (easy for me to say I know, but I do believe it... & I reckon at heart you probably know it too). Hope you are not feeling this low Paul in truth, the mere fact of writing this so successfully should have you feel more on top of it... fan that flame my friend!~ Anni ~~~ "Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving". ~Kahlil Gibran

hope presented of a strong spirit here. Great write! lol, I have tried to incorporate the idea of a puppeteer, but not been successful, as you have here! I don’t and am not trying to change the meaning Of your poem at all, cause is really nice. But don’t Be afraid or hesitate to make it seem personal. As you start and carry through your poem, you have A whole lot of action going on without a target. Does That make sense? But if you give the action a target, It helps it not be a continuous line. I also think (and This is just me) that it helps to break up your ideas, Give the reader pause to maybe reflect, time to think about What they are reading instead of rushing into the next Vision. This subject, is one many, many people can relate to, so They can, a lot of times, put themselves in the role. And it Becomes personal to them as well. I felt there were a few places you switch back and forth Between past/present and think consistency helps there. (and I hope I got those right.. past/present not always a strong point with me…lol) “like a dusted picture frame” I think you want a “dusty” picture frame, to show neglect. “Love has lost its’ rose petals” I think you can omit rose, we still get that visual of a flower..unless you just really feel you need that image of specifics. Again, I really like some of these lines.. Hope slithering, lost in the mediocrity of normal, joy Feeling like a dusty frame, love losing its petals to lust.. Just really nice creative lines. Way to go!! Remember, these are only ideas of one opinion I hope they are helpful. I will pm to you and let you see the suggestions as a whole. Thanks for the request to read, Paul. That means a lot to me. Always Sincere, Tonya