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Unwelcome novelties
Tirade in a box
Tear apart, cross your heart,
You're dragging along your companion
like luggage, a burden.

Screams of ecstasy,
Are you done with me?
Fall out shelter, empty cells. The populations popularity went missing.

The peak of the prison,
Tension in climax.
Cryptic calls for help
Along the scratched up walls,
Created for gems like you;
Jewel of emotion

— Kyarain, May 08, 2009

Critiques

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Wow Ky,

Girl, you have such an amazing way with words for someone so young! I simply love reading your poems. This one may be short, but it cuts to the point and its stunning. You may be the only one who knows what it's about, but let met ell you this could easily be deciphered so many ways by different ppl. I actually get flashbacks my self from some of your lines, like "Screams of ecstacy/are you dont with me?", or "Tear apart, cross your heart".....amazing. As always, well worth a read. Remember I'm here for ya if u ever need a friend or someone to talk to. Peace N Love Katie

Kyarain

17 years 2 months ago

Once more, thank you Katie

I'm so glad I go found this place. I really appreciate the time all of you take and the encouraging comments, because the more I write and read my work.. the more I tend to hate it. Its good to know I'm not just wasting my time, and may some day call myself a poet or claim poetry my skill. I write to get my emotions out, to gain control of something, if only words and patterns, I write to relate.. to the world, nature, people, words, and most of all myself. I find great joy in the fact that many of you can connect with my writing and get something productive out of reading it. Its good to be back! X) Peace, love, and dreams, Kyarain

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

This process you are

This process you are describing, which you do, which we all do, this catharsis, this need, IS poetry, in motion, (for me anyway!) and you dear girl are definitely a poet, and this is a very good poem! :)much love b x

Kyarain

17 years 2 months ago

I appreciate the compliment,

I appreciate the compliment, its the most wonderful thing to be called a poet. I really mean that. Its what I want to be, a writer.. to find some bit of truth in the world and bend words to my will. to make music and beautiful pieces of artwork with them. Peace, love, and dreams Ky~

Kyarain

17 years 2 months ago

Hoorah (just 'cause I wanted to?)

Ecstatic at your approval, Kelsey... XD thats always great to have! Loved that you loved it. I love words, love language.. can't wait to get better and learn more. Thanks everyone, especially you Twinny :D Peace, love, and dreams Ky~

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