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Assaulted !

My sorrow overwhelms me
my leaky eyes do shout,
what my eyes and wetted hands
have me crying, all about.

Yes, I can see the sunshine
only not around my life,
it goes on forever 'round me
but cuts me like a knife.

My tomorrows are surely numbered
and the pressure in my chest,
shows me only doom and gloom
which is the "bright side", at best.

Physically assaulted
and what's worse, 'twas by a "friend,
now, I can't hear out my right ear
so my music just might end.

So sad's my heart on this fine day
because of what I've lost,
our "friendship" didn't last, at all...
and Forever was the cost.
— docmaverick, May 07, 2009

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Doc...

I do hope you are ok... assaulted by a friend??? Richard
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 1 month ago

Yeah, Richard....

...that's why I put the quotation marks around "friend", and "friendship". What's worse is, he knows about my health problems. One shouldn't have to weather blows to the abdomen when he's already suffering from a swolen pancreas...or at all...for that matter. Thanks again, for both of you two's concerns. Write on ! #{:>{)]@==== docmaverick.
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Antoinette Mar…

17 years 1 month ago

I rated it highly because......

I can tell this write came from your heart...assulted by a friend in more than a physical way...a friend that you have helped in the past ...yet he has placed you in dire straits...I am so sorry I pray you will find comfort in expressing yourself...
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

Your poem is full of

your emotion. I am so sorry you had to deal with that pain from someone you obviously trusted. People shock the hell out of me sometimes and the things they can be capable. The poem is well written, even though the subject is terribly sad. There maybe a few places it is a little rough, just with the words, and not many places at that. Is very hard to give you a critique with such a depth of feeling presented and one that is so personal. ((Hugs)) My thoughts are with you, and I hope you feel much much better soon. soon. Always, Tonya