What a Life !

In the dawn of my small existence
I grow weary of the trends,
that are constantly suggesting
where and when to make amends;

for, lately I've discovered
that it's not always my fault,
yet my progress in all areas
seems to grind to a screeching halt.

Now, please don't think me foolish
(adding insult to injury),
but, I have all but had it
with this notion that we're "free".

Every last damned one of us
must finally admit,
that each and every one of us
owes something to some "nit-wit".

We owe someone , "thanks" when things go well
and an apology, when hit with strife,
will someone please inform me
why everyone else runs my whole life !?

I think it'll take a lifetime
for this crap to finally cease,
however, then we're far too old
and it's time to rest in peace.

— docmaverick, May 06, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

Hahahaha…aren’t you

right about that! This is a great comedic rant, lol, but it does ring with more than a smidgeon of truth! I wondered about adding an ‘all’ in the 2nd verse, 2nd line. “that it’s not always all my fault” I know you repeat all in the next line.. but, I think it works and adds that extra syllable for an even flow. And that ‘all’ there also, compliments the ahhh sound in fault… Dang it, I’m having to get really picky now. 5th verse, last line.. maybeeeee leave out the word ‘whole’ will make it read smoother too, I think. ? maybe? lol Verses 4 and 6 have to be my favorites. Too old to play and feel we don’t owe anything.. now, that is just sad! Excellent write Doc!! Entertaining, well worded, made me giggle too! Always Sincere, Tonya

Antoinette Mar…

17 years 1 month ago

gosh Doc, I can't find....

any problems with your poem, as life flows kinda zig zag dosn't it? we can have an uneven verse or two...I liked it very much and yes it made me giggle also....I even like the title!! LOL