Dedicated moments

You hold onto delicate believing and desire
Like the slim stick in the hands of a woman on a tight wire
I know you finally stepped out of the muddy quagmire
and now you’re running free and beautiful as it should be

Step into the sky
a free fall slow motion liberation of the heart
I want to listen to you, watch you singing
and dedicate my moments to your art

Somehow your voice is pulling at my history
and I am transfixed with wonder, pleasure and humility
I wish there was some way you could hear it through me
and now you’re running free and beautiful as it should be

Yes I’ve heard that tune before, but you bring magic to it
love that you have taken liberties, I knew you could do it
Transparent like a dragonfly’s wing, we see through it
and now you’re running free and beautiful as it should be

Ah you fell for Oberon, I know just how that feels
I’m hardly just recovering from his charm and nefarious deals
But the magic of you singing brings the life back as it heals
and now you’re running free and beautiful as it should be

— Cloudthings, May 06, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

Critiques

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Breathtakingly beautiful

... im speachless ... Touched my heart ... I floated my way all through this ... Oh that I could weave such beautiful words ... Congrates huni ... In Love and Light JayC x

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Thank you JayC, but you DO weave such beautiful words

Thank you JayC, but you DO weave such beautiful words, there is no comparison, I know you must know that Cheers~ Anni ~~~ "Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving". ~Kahlil Gibran

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Anni your too kind

I wont argue with someone who is ill LOL this is simply beautiful .... And I hope you and yours get better real soon it was still worth five to me it spoke to me and it isnt often poetry does that ... Take care huni and keep warm and get well real soon (((((((((((((hugz))))))))))))) x x With Love JayC x x

orgami

17 years 1 month ago

Agree with Seren

beautiful poem Cloudthings i love my poems from 2007 here on Neo poet and from earlier on Diaryland where suprise I am ORGAMI there too

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Thank you, yeah there are some earlier works I love

Hey O', thank you, I have just tweeked since the first verse was clumsy, still not right I think, but better than when I posted exhausted last night. Hard to take my own words above in the light of your recent writes my friend, I feel pretty humbled by your skill today xx~ Anni ~~~ "Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving". ~Kahlil Gibran

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

Anni, I wish you could read

Anni, I wish you could read through me hon, your writing is so gorgeous, what ever style you chose beauty always shines through. Loved the poem, the sentiment, the imagery, all of it. :) much love b xxx Ps, Hope you ok and had good birthday? I missed you but you're back with gusto and I see I am already behind on your posts! I feel I have catching up to do all over and not just on my own poems! Love it so though! :) and have all evening to indulge here! x Pps, was going to PM you regarding my response to your myspace page as thought it may be embarrassing (for both of us!!) to gush so extremely, so publicly but what the hell ;) you have the most stunning voice babe, I'd say angelic but there's something more raw in it, the dirt of experience, the grit of emotion, and such soulful purity, soooo beautiful, reminiscent of Eva Cassidy (take that! ;)) and gorgeous songs. Can't tell you how much I loved listening, had you on repeat whilst I wrapped my friend's birthday presents. You are one VERY talented lady. More love b x

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Ta sweetness It's easier to dish it out than to take it isn't it

Yes, I think I might be blushing, if I were standing I might be shuffling my feet & twiddling my thumbs in a kind of physical forms of "shucks". Thank you sweet thing. It's easier to dish it out than to take it isn't it. In truth I feel this write could be better, it has potential, but there is something not quite there in a few places & in my unwell state I have no creative energy (think his is the first time I can remember being stopped from writing), hence the reviewing some older stuff. I was hoping to have recovered by today, but I think G & I might have another day of home schooling (tricky getting my brain around that as well just now), think my body is just saying STOP, I don't ... ever much, awful letting all my kids down & scary that I might lose work by not being available, tricky being self employed... Ahh but far worse things happen, this is so minute in the big picture, those poor folk in Mexico. Take care honey xxx~ Anni ~~~ "Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving". ~Kahlil Gibran

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

dedicated moments

I liked this one,and read it again and again just for the rythym. Seems almost like a rap version of a poem! So sorry that you and your boy are ill. I know what you mean by not feeling all that creative. You just want to feel better,and don't care much about anything more than how you feel. Get well soon,both of you,Gee.