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Forgiving Be Thy Name ...

On a journey down the mile
A priest knelt down in prayer
"Our father help me guide this lost soul
To your loving embrace
That you may be his last judge
His stain of death will mark him
So that you might welcome him
his return home imminent .......Amen"
The priest continued on his way
Heavy of heart ..
his horror of what lay ahead marking his face
nearing the cell He pauses
The hardest part lay before him
The warden appearing pulls him aside ...
" Keep him calm with your gibberish father
We'll do the rest "
Cold Grey walls surround him
silver bars
The only splash of light or shine
Prison a hellish place to live
Let alone die
Blah blah blah the warden
rambling on his voice fading
Nothing of the tragedy
The Killing time to come
Oh the horror in the knowing
The hour of our death
Arriving at their destination
The warden steps back
wanting no part of what was next
Metal bars swing back
revealing a man of mammoth proportions
needle worn skin a moving picture of colour
"Hello Brother "
The priest freezes in time
before him a brother lost
found Oh Lord only to loose him again
Desperation horror madness
All cross the priest's face
"Why ?" says the priest
"Though we don't share belief or lifestyle
I love you brother ..
I ask your forgiveness for your compassion
My blood flows through your veins
Much as they say god flows through yours
I only ask for a brothers forgiveness
That i may meet my death
Having made my peace with my blood"
For a time silence
Bile rising in the back of his throat
The priest fighting for composure
Steels himself ..
"As a priest I forgive you
As your brother I grieve for you"
Reaching for his brother
Arms like logs wrap round the priest
Sobbing for what could have beens
The brothers sat like this till ...
Time was called

 

 

 

— Seren, May 04, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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orgami

17 years 1 month ago

From Tinks Chat

read this today and left to ponder and tonight this link from chat re introduced me The read was flawless the story emotive thank you
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Steven

The priest and his brother are in fact real people in a different setting but the story is the same ... Brothers lost then found only to be lost quite soon again ... So glad you liked this and thank you for reading it ... In poetry and life Love JayC x x
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 1 month ago

Powerful...

Was a little runed away at first cause of the whole religious feel, but it turned out to be a very powerful story into itself. Readit tonight in tink's chat. Peace n Love Katie
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Thank you

Katie .. I am soooo glad you liked this .. Ive been reading more and more of you lately and your writing some awesome pieces Yourself ... So glad the message got across as noone had commented on it I didnt think I had got my story over .. I am no expert at this and I am very much learning as I go ... Thanks again In poetry and life Love JayC x
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Justice

17 years 1 month ago

Nice

I like the allegorical/narrative aspect of this poem. I think many people could take something from this by extracting their own meanings from it but also contemplating the meanings inherent. Nice work =]
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Thanks heaps Jussie ….

Thanks heaps Jussie .... This was a first go at writing a poem like this never have writen anything in this style before .. Thanks so much for taking the time to read it hun ... Glad you liked it aye :D love and light JayC x x
B

Bosscombat

17 years ago

:)

id never hug a priest LMAO awesome poem hun, loved this one too <3
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Matty your a bad man...............

LMFAOOOOO AND YOUR MAD !!!! BUT I love ya dearly hahahahaha .. Really glad you liked this one and its good to see you back among us I know your busy getting ready for the tour .. love and light Jaynee x x