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My Silent Brave {Extremly PORNAGRAFIC people, read at own risk}

 My Silent Brave,


 My eyes open upon the valley and vista

   Inspired war cry’s from every camp.

 My brave brings me in on his pinto

   a slow mesmerizing gait.

 Hoofed rhythm soothing me,

   calls from all around,

    but I can not name the sentiments.
 

 
I am Led to a hide door,

   warmth creeping from the cracks.

 What exist behind it?

 What does this mean for me?

 Pulling back a curtain of fear,

   I enter a different world.

 Earth and fire invade my senses.

 Furs and pelts become furnishings.

 Wood and stone, now carved vessels.

 Light dancing through threaded seems,

   a foreign world all a new.

 

A shove from my back side,

   no where left to run.

 

Do I want to?
 

 

I look at my Brave,

   he has treated me well.

 Brought me miles through the wilderness

   we traveled,

     learned,

      discovered.

 He doesn’t need to talk much,

   his meaning are easy to interpret…

 Speaking for both of us.
 

 Who is he,

   does it matter?
 

 I should be afraid,

   tremble at his sight….

 Tremble yes,

   but not from fear.

 

He has taunted me with his nearness

   for almost a week,

     his silence screaming more than words.

 As his chest slid against my back over and over,

   arms circling around me.

     Lifting me,

      shifting me,

 Strength pouring from his massive shoulders.

 Enticing me with his bare skin against my dress,

   his manly aroma hypnotizing me.

 His knowing grin telling me how sinful

   he knows he could make me.
 

 

But not yet…
 

 

From fear to fever I have been driven,

   I changed as I crossed that dry prairie.

 Now in possession of no common sense.

 Reckless,

   my Mother would have said…

    …But she is not here…

      ..He is.
 

 

I turn and ask him for his name,

   he grins and pulls me down.

 “Please tell me, What is your name?”

 And with a half smile he leans in and

   whispers in my ear,

 “Ohitecka”

 Lifting his finger to my lips.

   engaging my silence.

 Now sitting on my knees before him,

   he slides his fingers through my long

     auburn locks,

      uncaring of the dust.

 Looking at me straight in the eyes,

   to the very center of my being.
 

 His hands caressing down the curve of my waist.

   moving up the cord on the front of my Dress

    Unlacing it,

     releasing my heavy milky white Breasts.
 

 I have a moment of panic,

 I don’t know what to do…
 

 But I need not have worried,

   he is a master of such skill.

 More than happy to show me what I need to know,

   teaching me what he wants,

     how he likes it.
 

 He nuzzles my pink areolas flicking his tongue gently,

   sending sensations to unknown places.

 Drawing wet circles of anticipation.

 Locking his lips upon my nipple and softly suckling,

   feeding our desire.

 Grasping them as he would a ripe melon he is about to devour.
 

 

His callused palms starting at my ankles,

   then sliding up my calf.

 Slowly displacing my skirt and

   exposing my pearly legs one inch at a time.

 He lays me back against the thick fur of Buffalo,

   eating me with his eyes,

     showing the reason and hunger for stealing me from my parents farm.

 Looking satisfied with his spoils.
 

 Before I was aware I lay completely naked before him.

   I have never seen my naked body in a mirror,

      but the reflection from his eyes was all I needed.

 I knew he approved,

   and that he thought I was perfect…

 

I Could feel his excitement become my own,

   as his finger’s explored places with racy names.

 Warm and then Wet.

 His tongue quickly following in their path.

 My body responding with out thought,

   my loins screaming from unknown pleasure.
 

 I lay my hands on his head,

   only capable of small whimpers.

 While I can barley make out deep guttural growls

   from the back of his throat,

     taking me to heights I have never been,

       dared.
 

 

He leans back and push’s aside his loin cloth,

   his large throbbing member exposed,

     guiding me down to it.

 His eyes telling me what he expected..

 I grasp his manhood with both hands,

   and slowly extend my tongue.

 Lightly I lick its engorged head,

   feeling his heartbeat against my lips as

 I look out of the corner of my eye

   to see his expression.

 His eyes look to almost roll to the back of there sockets,

   occasional slightly louder growls now emerging.

 He pushes harder on my head,

   I instinctually open my mouth and

     he raises his hips,

       sending his manhood deep with in.
 

 

Almost confused as to why he would want to,

 but the look on his face again,

 tells me he does.

 Again and again…
 

 

I was finding the rhythm to maintain my breathing,

   rocking back and forth as if on ocean water’s.
 

 Before I could think of what was to come next,

   he was pulling me up to him,

     rolling his weight up and over me.

 Spreading my legs with his own.
 

 Again I felt a moment of uncertainty,

   hesitation,

     but riddled with the flames of wanting to know.

 

He poise’s his large hard erect head with in his hand

   rubbing it around my moistened private lips

     renewing my wanton behavior.

 Teasing with pressure,

   showing his patience for his own desire.

 And in under a second he slipped a inch in to my woman hood.

   claiming my virginity for his own.
 

 Sharp,

   tight,

     unsure,

       and again a tinge of fright.
 

 

Is this what he wants,

  he can not fit it in that place.

 But again the look on his face,

 the stare in to my soul told me he did.

 He continues slowly,

 I do not stop him,

 nor do I want to.
 

 

Soon his whole shaft has evaded me,

   discomfort still present,

     but now unimportant.

 I then realize I am moaning aloud,

   almost ashamed to recognize my own voice.

     his keeps plunging,
 
       ever gaining his speed,

 He may split me apart.

 A flood of pain subsiding to a

   flow of pleasure.
 

 

For an eternity we make our own dance,.

   sing our own song,

    praying to gods of carnal indulgence.

 He pushes faster,

   harder,

    and we both feel as

      the crescendo of physical abandon

        wash’s over us.

 Both for once in complete surrender,

   sweat dripping from our brow…

 He lays back beside me,

   and just as before he say's not a word,

     we both seemed to drift in and out,

       locked in each others embrace.

 

My fears vanquished,

   my soul complete.

 I could lay here forever…

   but he has other thoughts.

 As again he gives me that wordless look and

   we started all over from the beginning…….

 

Julie

 D.D.

 5/3/2009

 Uuummmm….. I was going for passionate but it came out pornography, I would say sorry, but I am quite pleased. Although I am sure embarrassment will creep in when people start to review it. For all of you who have read Seeded visions, you may already know who my brave is. By the way, “Ohitecka” Means “brave” in Sioux. Still being worked on. It took me forever for the formatting, I wrote on it in to many places.

— DawningDaytripper, May 04, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

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Critiques

themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Whew....

Let me get hold of myself...err I mean... uhhh damn... Julie... erotic exotic hypnotic and I for one will never knock it... the sexual side glows on you... did I ever tell you my Indian name.... lol.... surprised and loved it Julie... thanks! excellent ending! Richard
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 1 month ago

Potent stuff Julie

When very young it is all discovery, the actual magic of being with the one we love is quite otherwise, but this did it justice the learning, although the partners were not balanced in experience. Some parts are uncomfortable to have in a poem but then poetry is also about life and life is so. I don't really know what to conclude but you must have had fun thinking it up, if it was thought up? anew meanings without barely just a few odd words? There you are I have commented nn of Norway
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

BRAVE!

JULIE!!!!!! There are six exclaimation points after your name,as many as I wish there were stars! Woooooooooo! As Rick Flair would say. You deserve that extra star,just for having the courage to post this.[echoing the Moonmans' sentiments],let me grab hold of myself. I can't find a flaw anywhere,we all know that this will never see the light of the spot-light,but you can be sure that it will not escape anyones' notice. Great job Julie! Gee.
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

p.s.........

Looks like nn, of Norway, might have been a little affected,after all.
NE

NEW ERA

17 years 1 month ago

I can't wait to see my boyfriend!

Well I have to say I had a smile on my face the whole time reading it. Very sexy, nothing wrong with a little sexual talk as I'm a very sexual being and just loved it. Cathy New ERA You go girl!
Rett

Rett

17 years 1 month ago

Purty darn good

Double D. You sure pushed you limits this time. After reading this I feel like I need a cigarette. *he says as he limps out the door. No, nothing's the matter with my leg dammit!* Respectfully, Rett: Hug a logger, you'll never go back to trees! For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

17 years 1 month ago

miles through the wilderness...

hey Julie, quite the Brave ;-) write. I enjoyed reading it though I found it to be a bit too sexual for a poem but that's just a matter of personal taste. what you did really well, in my opinion, is keeping it sensual. it is so hard not to slip into a vulgar language with something of this length. way to go, dear, I surely wouldn't have managed to keep it even half as tasteful! please consider checking the times you used again, I noticed you were jumping around a bit grammatically. I absolutely loved how you bound a story of mystery into this. it leaves so many questions unanswered. I would love to have a seperate poem as an introduction telling of the journey there. the few lines about that were so sensual, left me wanting more descriptions of the ride. keep up the good work, Julie! great to read this. your Proprietress
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

Julie

i just read your comment in change to the system. and, i wrote and thought, okay, if i am going to pick a stance for anything, i need to stick with it. so, here goes. I have noticed you seemed to think you had lost your readers.. (This one seems to have gotten quite a few reviews, actually!) But, i wanted to comment on this one. Actually, i also feel this is more of a short snippet of a story than poem. I don't think it is badly written at all. You did a good job with the writing. My problem with this is i have read this before. Not a plagerism, just the idea though. Pick up most any historical harliquin type book, this scene or one similar will be there. the captive, fallen for her captor, and they make passionate love. I don't get into the graphic as much as some. I like the idea, subtleties. I think, people look for originality.. and you have that in some of your other works. Like i said, not written bad at all, just a little too graphic for my taste, and not really original in thought. I am really doing my best to give good critique. Always Sincere, Tonya
Tonya

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

Oh, Julie,

I was a little hesitant in even posting the comment. But, i am glad i did now. and i would not say you flunked! lol, is hard (pardon the pun) not to feel a little passion when one reads that. (i'm sure your husband found it most appealing. be honest..how many times has he played the brave now?) I suppose, what i was getting at, is just trying to be creative, which you are in many of your poems. I'm a stay home person, so i understand the tendency to spend way too much time here also. I may get to go out tonight to. My husband actually suggested the movies. Not sure if that comes with dinner yet or not. Hope so, is hot today and i really dont want to cook. I promise to go through burnt ashes for you. I know it was very close to your heart and really gave you a lot of anguish. Is hard for people to comment on things that become so personal, UNLESS... it is something they themselves can identify with. But, writing is our therapy sometimes. And it feels good to get those feelings out. So, I am glad you put pen to paper, or fingers to keyboard in most cases nowdays. Have a good time this evening! I'll say a little prayer for dinner for the both of us! Thanks Julie. Always, Tonya
Mark

Mark

17 years ago

One Talented Brave

Great job here Julie. Kept me going :) I wonder if you meant to use with out as two words, and his in the stead of he? Mark
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years ago

Ha! You are now the

Ha! You are now the word-slut. ;-) And wtf is a man when you need one? None but brave! lol. ~A http://www.neopoet.com/node/21242 "No one shall be subjected to torture or to cruel, inhuman or degrading treatment of punishment." Article 6 of the Universal Declaration of Human Rights.
B

bjp

17 years ago

Dear Julie

I didn't want to read this poem. I wanted to read this poem. Why? This is an exhilarating and a very scary poem. These things are true whether taking the prospective of you the writer or me the reader. Exhilarating and scary because it is like watching that most intimate of moments. And although the fact of your having written it, and having placed it here, suggests, or more than suggests, permission to view it, most readers, and me personally, feel a natural empathy with you and typically will be shoulder-checking to be sure you are all right. And that is in part the issue: neither the writer nor the reader knows for-sure-for-sure that everything is all right; thus, we as readers tend to offer comforting affirmations and try to join you in some kind of solidarity (I certainly am, but by God if you tell me it has anything to do with sex I'll rewrite this review (no I won't)). But writing is so exhilarating because it is a solo flight and you, the writer, only knows after the fact whether you will be accepted in the face of your sacrifice. So, you called it pornographic before anyone else could, trying to keep possession of any name calling to reduce the impact of same. Trust me, you would still be crushed if you felt that was what we thought (it also helps with readership. What?). Still, I would take the same useless precaution, if only to help give a heads-up to the reader to be kind. However, you, Julie, I repeat, you are all on show so it is you that gets credit for the courage here; and that courage is really too special for words. A very very good special. Nevertheless, perhaps you remain uncertain as to the whole event and the writing and opening to an audience is a form of second guessing. You see, my last sentence need not be true, but is a gauge of potential for speculation that gives measure to the sheer courage of your gesture. For this poem was conceived in the knowledge that every reader is left to exponentiate their own thoughts from the story. I tend to be forward (for a variety of reasons none of which relate very much to others' approval except in the form of rebellion). So I have spelled out all of the above where normally it remains unsaid. I guess I think that if it doesn't get said, maybe you don't know that others are giving you the extent of credit which is so obviously deserved. I am not going to talk too much about technique here, mostly because getting the story out is so hard that technique becomes secondary, at least for the early iterations of the poem. I will say, that at some point, in the relatively distant future you might consider reviewing the technique: when the substance and the fear is more distant. If you don't do a review, you risk issues relating to technique overshadowing, with time, the shear importance of the sharing. I have a reputation for arrogance, partially deserved, which leads me to summarize what the commentators to date are saying, in paraphrase: you are held in esteem not only for what you have shared but for encouraging courage generally. This is a true sentiment which I suggest you will find throughout the writing community (which typically gives credit where credit is due). Now all of the above may seem to suggest an assumption that the poem is a recount of a real event. That knowledge is yours, not mine. Real with imagination or just imagination, you end up putting you on the line in a way that remains exhilarating and scary. My congratulations. bjp
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years ago

Fascinating comment bjp; we

Fascinating comment bjp; we are all witnesses to our own life, to the lives of others. Poets take that extra step, always pushing the envelope.... the deeper we are inside ourselves and the more transparent we are, our reader has permission to be who they already are. We are not empty vessels until we empty ourselves in our art, our poetry. Much love to all, Anna "No one shall be subjected to torture or to cruel, inhuman or degrading treatment of punishment." Article 6 of the Universal Declaration of Human Rights.
Mark

Mark

17 years ago

didn't really pass

far from porno really and thanks for my eight thousandth point no hard feelings really ;) Mark "some things change, some things don't"