Moonbeam Kisses

speaking of warming souls... this poem did just that thought it was great hey... 5 stars, 2 thumbs up and a smile. <3 p.s you pushed your vocab up a notch for this one huh! wicked, some words in there i had to look up hahahah

This one has promise and i can certainly feel how the moonlight and night breeze have entered into your soul. I felt though that the first verse was not quite evocative enough, mainly as a result of word choice (i didn't really see diaphenous and fibrils together for example and instruments and orchestra in the same line made it sound a little too technical. The hard stoccato sound of the word orchestra disturbs the flow rather...so maybe something softer like "symphony"). Anyway this is a suggestion of an alternative beginning: Oh Moonbeam As your diaphanous streams wash my face … A singing wind heralds your arrival Trees swaying in time with the tempo Leaves the instruments of nature's symphony Rustle in harmony with earth's choir … My grey negative retreat, Turned slight blue heaven … after this its all pretty good and i enjoyed it. Although i dont think you mean "alight" which is to land on something rather than to illuminate it. Hope your moon is shining down on you right now. Keith x