A New Me

OMG you did! You posted one! I am sooooooo happy for you! *gives paul a flower* Great poem, as well, my friend. I applaud you. I love the last 4 lines, determination and strength. Stand strong. All falls into place as it's meant to be. Peace N Love *hugs* Katie

Good flow. Liked it a lot. especially the message. Respectfully, Rett: Hug a logger, you'll never go back to trees! For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

Paul this is great!!! and its awesome to read somethin from you!! keep em comin buddy!! lots of love, Syd

This was rreeaallyy good Paul! You should reeally post more! Peace, ANC:D

You have well stated what so many have felt and can relate to. When you write of these common denominators, your readers have to react. I really like the conclusion you have come to in the poem also. To realize ones worth. And all the hell, all the tortures felt, are not worth it. The poem flows well sir. The sounds of your words all work well together also. Really nice writing. Bravo for you! Always Sincere, Tonya

I was beginning to wonder if you were ever going to write & post anything new! I like the title - it's the Paul that puts his foot down!! Good job on this poem, Paul - it clearly conveys your feelings and your resolution not to be disrespected again. :-) However, I must admit - it is needing some punctuation in certain places to help emphasize the point. Great work and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!!!!

This is excellent. As the others have said, it's the "fuck you, it's my time to shine now, back on my own two feet" type poem. Nicely done, friend. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- - "Atheism is a non-prophet organization" - George Carlin -"Don't sweat the petty things and don't pet the sweaty things" - George Carlin

hehehehe I have been a good girl up till now here and I havnt cut loose and swore but I agree with jess its a fuck you ... and a well said it was too... :D Love and Light JayC x

I agree with Julie about the repetition of "being", although, strangely, it would work if they were 2 long lines , so "being" wasn't at the end of the line. Would change the shape and emphasis of the piece too. Also question "once more..." Once more? No more is the message! A tiny thing but in my opinion weakens it a little. Good compression in the last 2 lines. Go hard and stand tall, brother! A fine write. cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.

a good strong Poem Paul we need to be heard all of us