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A Bright Light She Came a Visiting; a Visiting One Morn

 A Bright Light She Came a Visiting; a Visiting One Morn
 
 A traitorous sunrise,
 Dear Destruction,
 Searing across the Universe
 To visit extinction,
 Like an unwelcome fracture.
 A pause in time that consumes
 Everything
 And leaves a blanket of dust
 Chilled;
 Lifeless;
 Devoid of hope.
 Promising a Winter of Infinity
 Of Nights
 So inked
 The stars have ceased to exist
 And Spring
 Forgotten,
 Mislaid,
 Abolished
 Like the disintegration of the dawn.
 You are missed,
 But not with affection.
 You are remembered,
 But not with exhilaration.
 You are feared
 But not
 With enough trepidation
 Or planning
 Or preparation.

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This is presented as an example of an entry to the May Contest:

http://www.neopoet.com/forum/21468

  • Free form
  • Open format
  • Must reference only inanimate objects
  • 750 characters or less INCLUDING THE TITLE OF THE POEM (that is CHARACTERS people not WORDS - character is one (1) word consisting of 10 characters)
  • For purposes of the contest spaces are not counted as characters

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— Pugilist, May 01, 2009

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Region, Country: Jacksonville area, FL, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Keats, Kipling, Carroll, Yeats, Tolkien, Shakespeare

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yenti

yenti

17 years 1 month ago

The visitor

Very well thought out hopefully I will not be here as this takes place but the end is the same as the beginning and as the middle reaches out to encompass both, I will be in the audience as this happens. There is little man who is favored among the mamals to be able to think enough to destroy himself before the great light comes. A good write but maybe a little deep for the watchers, Yours, Ian.T
Jonathan Moore

Jonathan Moore

17 years 1 month ago

Yenti

Thanks for the review and comment. I believe you are correct in that this is a rather obtuse write. I wanted to try my hand at the May contest rules and a recent documentary on meteorites sprang to mind. I have a habit of personifying inanimate objects so, strictly speaking, I may have violated the intent of the rules while adhering to the letter of them. Since none of my test or example entries make it to judging, that's not a huge problem. Again though, thank you for your time and comments on this. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)