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souleaters

He brought the ethra of a thousand souls,
I having naught but Mother Earth.
To protect me from the thunderous blows
And the blackness of his mirth!

The sky is ebon, without starlight,
A mountain limned against the dark.
There he sits in his cloak of blight,
He takes the essence of mans' spark.

He takes the lifes'blood from our nation,
The gods are trapped by his power.
Caring too much for their creation,
This is not their finest hour.

They have no choice,but give what's asked,
Our lives,our souls,they're forced to give.
We can't choose our own soul-masks,
They can't fix the time we'll live.

In the spell of manner so foul,
Wreathed in faint,blue-purple magic,
Designed to see beneath lifes' cowl.
How it seems so very tragic!

Clouds shot with silver shimmers,
Storms fly across the land.
They tremble and they shiver,
The souls underneath his hand.

Black-robed rites,on deadly raids,
Our spirits are sucked dry.
Spells to kill us as they're made,
Can't let this time get by.

Exhausted by the awful truth,
And the battles he makes me pick.
He strips from me my sweet youth,
He does not let go so quick!

Earths' power is in me,flowing,
I can see the darkness flee.
Gold tips on trees,leaves glowing.
The land now returns to me.

Front to back,and hind to fore,
Black gives way to colors' hue.
Foggy spirits, now retreat once more,
The sky turns slow, pale blue.

Mother answers to my call,
Light does pierce the gloom.
I cannot...must not fall,
A new day begins to bloom.

Mothers' soul gives me strength,
The rose of dawn,speaks to spell.
I will go to any length,
We must now,escape this hell.


 

— Geezer, Apr 30, 2009

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IRENE

17 years 1 month ago

souleaters

i wish i had your way with words lovely regards Irene
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

Entranced

Thank you,I appreciate the kind words,Julie. I had to work very hard to get this where it is,and still am not really satisfied. But it was time to move on. I have other things I want to get out. Maybe I will revisit this at a later date and make some revisions. I love your attempt at evil and think you made a very good show. Gee.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 1 month ago

Nearly there Geezer

They have no choice,but give what’s asked, ( They have no soul, but take what' asked) - didn't like give twice! Our lives,our souls,they’re forced to give. We can’t choose our own soul-masks, They can’t fix the time we’ll live. He strips from me my sweet youth, (He strips me from my own sweet youth,) He does not let go so quick! ( Not letting go so quick!) Front to back,and hind to fore, ( I love this line) Black gives way to colors’ hue. Foggy spirits, now retreat once more, ( foggy spirits retreat once more,) The sky turns slow, pale blue. (?...not sure what to do here- The sky turns slowly the pales blue. (?)) Mothers’ soul gives me strength, ( Mother's soul gives to me strength,) The rose of dawn,speaks to spell. (The rose of dawn's bright spell.) I will go to any length, ( I will strive to any length,) We must now,escape this hell. (Together we must escape this hell.) .....No that's not good - the last two lines are not strong enough in rhythm and meaning to give the poem the power it wishes to express, they could be in a simple way more noble I think, I leave it up to you Geezer I have thought around this one and like the overall idea there were just the little things that seemed to worry me a bit. Limned - this word I do not understand? Soon it will sing for you! Yours Ann of Norway
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years ago

sweet!

That title just exudes awesome-ness, and there were many good lines to choose from. ------------------------------------------------------- "Until that ‘morrow render unto me That which is mine my stipend well deserved The fairest flower of your progeny Your sons, your daughters your hopes and your dreams The cruel consequence of your conceit" - Steve Earle