faerybeki

Apr 30, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Insecurities

the torch of you shines
a light on my insecurities

they scatter like roaches
they love to hide in the dark

waiting for the shadows
of doubt to return

concealed in the cracks
of my heart

ready to surface
and tear me apart

— faerybeki, Apr 30, 2009

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themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Beki...

vivid imagery... I guess we've all seem them roaches at one time or another... I think you could add to this one Beki... or not... It just made me wonder about your insecurities... Richard

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Cheers Richard, just the

Cheers Richard, just the kind of feedback I was hoping for..sometimes I get 'pieces' of poems that need adding to and sometimes they can stand alone, wasn't sure what this one was! I'm wondering if the title makes it need adding to and provokes the wondering? If it was called 'Roaches' (I considered this) would it seem more complete? always grateful and interested to know what you think Richard, much love b x

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Excellent question...

Sometimes the title can change the whole image in a poem, especially a short poem... but, I think I would have still felt it incomplete... but don't take my word for it, let's see what others may think... I know what you mean about the pieces, I have em all through my notebooks... just waiting for me to add to, or call them done... always good to read you and I enjoy your comments very much... a gem you are... and you fish???? damn!! Richard

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks for getting back to

Thanks for getting back to me so quickly :) I have added a couple of lines, makes it feel a bit fuller, to me anyway. Yes, I love to fish but haven't caught anything the last few trips (other than a wave!) got into it through my ex (Omi's father) I was always eager to get involved in his passsions, although he was less than encouraging of me, but I'm grateful to him, for her and for fishing :) much love b x

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Kelsey, I still

Thanks Kelsey, I still wasn't sure if those extra 2 lines made the difference, it did feel fuller but perhaps still incomplete. Will think on it and of course share if I get anywhere. I think the poem is trying to say that someone might be able to scatter your insecurities but they remain with you, hiding in the dark, until you, yourself, deal with them. Please don't think I mean to appear 'sorted' for me it's a constant battle that I'm only just beggining to win :) But I do hope you find someone who loves you, you deserve it, we all do :) much love b xx

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

love, I believe, is the way to shine away the shadows (insecurit

Hey Beki, really liking these shifts in you, constantly transforming, fantastic... Ahh my winged one, the cracks in your heart are what lets the light in (as per "Anthem" Leonard Cohen)... those insecurities just create shadows, thats all, shadows are deceptive, but they will never tear you apart my friend... you have too much love, & love, I believe, is the way to shine the shadows away. So Beki.... much love to you xxx~ Anni PS put new songs up on my site, love to know your thoughts xx ~~~ "Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving". ~Kahlil Gibran

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Anni, glad you like the

Hi Anni, glad you like the 'shifts' in my writing, I do like to experiment with form and style. I love how you (or Leonard) put it, the cracks letting the light in, gorgeous! :) and I agree that love is the way to shine the shadows away (again you articulate this beautifully!) Am v excited about listening to your new songs, I've no doubt I'll love them, that gorgeous voice of yours could sing the phonebook and I'd love it ;) will listen when I get a chance hon, Omi and I are staying with my mum and dad for the week so not sure how much time I'll be able to spend here on Neo, (I really ought to be spending time with them!) if I 'owe' you a reply anywhere else you'll have to forgive me babe. Hope all well in your skies you beautiful thing, much love b xx

paparazii

17 years 2 months ago

Insecurities

And even though they tears our hearts apart, there is always a time to get mended, we humans are the results of the masterwork, we're capable to to re-create ourselves.

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

I do love the way you put

I do love the way you put things my shanwari and you're so right, oh but I do have these little insecurities, they float up like bubbles, but they get less and surface less often if I keep popping them lol :) Thanks for stopping here Ephy :) much love b xx

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Beki....

Just wanted to let you know I've been back to read your piece... and to me, it does seem complete now. You really have the talent for getting it out! Richard

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Richard, that really

Thanks Richard, that really means a lot, it was you who kickstarted the completion of this piece, i'll call it done now :) much love b x

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