Dollaconomy

As times grow difficult for all of us
and we witness what is to be,
purchases become like the lightening
only striking sparingly.

A bottle of prosperity
seems very, very rare,
and as connoisseurs label a price
we can't afford to even care.

With families flailing and disbanding
it seems futile to raise a voice,
against a voted sadness
that was done to us by choice.

Farewell, my dreams of luxury
it's too sad they'll never exist,
but I'm ecstatic for my blessings
given me with an iron fist.

No complaints you'll hear from me, my friend
no one would listen, anyway...
I'll just do my very level best
to try and survive, yet another day.

Change, we yearn for everyday
but not too much change, we fear;
because there's way too many tears to pay
by the bucket, at the end of the year.

— docmaverick, Apr 28, 2009

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Critiques

Nordic cloud

17 years 1 month ago

Very , very nicely put

Very very nicely put. because there’s way too many tears to pay ( way too many a tear to pay? or?) by the bucket, at the end of the year. Oh I don't know, its just a tiny thing, the last to lines if changed a little would make it worth the 5 stars I think it deserves them. Yours Ann of Norway

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

Well look at you!

Mr, "i have no eloquent words"! I believe you have stated what most of us feel, very eloquently indeed! I love the title.. lol, took just a second to find your new created word, but fits nicely with your message. (Very creative) I suppose you are right, all we can do is go with the flow, hope for a 'little' change, so we all don't panic too much. There are a few places, i feel (and just my opinion) you can smooth out to make the words flow together a little more smoothly. When you combined similar sounding words, there is a better effect on the reading. The reader doesn't have to stumble or nor is more apt to 'pause' in mid sentence.. just see what you think and agree or not. Vs 4 "it’s too sad they’ll never exist" It’s too sad they’re never to exist’ *the 'errr' sound between they're--neveeer is must easier to say than they'll never... make sense? Vs 5 "to try and survive, yet another day" ‘To try and survive another day’ I don't think you need 'yet'. Is already understood by the word another, and it makes the beat of the read more even, so again, it flows more smoothly. last verse…1st line is good...last 3 lines: "but not too much change, we fear; because there’s way too many tears to pay by the bucket, at the end of the year." ‘But too much change, we fear; There’re way too many tears to pay, At the ending of the year’ ..I like the bucket of tears idea.. but .. i don't know on that last line, just changing end to ending, to me makes it, again, smoother. I loved the message and think you are doing fabulous! Yours, and Always sincere, :) Tonya

docmaverick

17 years 1 month ago

My mentor....

...(the elf), is probably seething with frustration. He believes that my forte' is in the freeform vernacular. As for me, I've always had a "softspot" for the rhyming Western Classic. As always, I sincerely am flattered every time I recieve any comment from you two. So, I thank you, wholeheartedly ! Write on ! #{:>{)]@==== docmaverick.