April is Autumn for us

bjp, I wish I had got here before Jonathon, though I do agree with him, I now feel like I am hiding behind his apron. I would have said the same regarding opinion & how you have actually presented yours as if it is the only acceptable way (almost suggesting that rhyme has no validity because that's what you have decided), however I did indicate I was happy to be "knocked on my back" & I think you have had a good shot at that with this very sharp & somewhat scathing crit. though I don't expect you actually meant to be hurtful or damaging (I do think it is lucky you chose me in this regard, I feel maybe some would not be so able to let it roll so easilly, or feel a little crushed by it). I can see why you might suggest some of these things, despite the opinion issue, & I have to say there is something about your harsh discrimination that has always been both scary & magnetising at the same time, partly because I would not always have been able to stand in your space & feel my own opinion had any worth, but as it happens (& as I alluded to in the very first connection I made with you) I feel quite comfortable with whatever you say, that doesn't mean I agree. I find it odd though that you seemed initially to be saying you liked the work & were proud of me, & this seems to have a very different angle? I will say this in my defense, though I don't feel particularly in need of defense as such, I am predominently a song writer, that's what I have done essentially for many years & generally songs work better in rhyme, though there have been a few that don't & I have also written many a piece that does not rhyme. All of that is habit more than anything & I am here to expand my expressive abilities so I am happy to try less comfortable or accustomed styles, & to explore the styles & opinion od others, including yours which I do feel have much to offer or I would never have made those comments in the first place. As for rhyming with the line you pointed out, I probably wouldn't rhyme with it, I have an entirely different view of poetry to you in that regard, I love the challenge of working the words & the rhymes, the rhythms & flow of the lines... I would (as example to answer your question) work the stanza something like... "Season atrophies, I wonder as my own year looms will Autumn fade me will greying winter find me too slowly losing tension from these cells that made me" ...in order to make it rhyme & if that word trned up in a rhyming line I might keep it & move it position for exampe... I know your questions were rhetorical, but I feel it is fare for me to answer them, if not for you, then for anyone else that mmight read this so they are reasssured that there are answers to those questions you put there. There are people here who rhyme far more smoothly & eloquently than me, & those who express in a similar way without using rhyme at all, I admire all of these styles, as I admire your work, as you know, I know there are those who prefer various styles, it IS important to remember these ARE just opinions, that way we are able to explore these & learn more, which is my desire. You remind me I wrote this to you I assume... “I ramble, … let …words float around us …picking up whatever expression on the way, we birth them raw, fecund, not so much ripe as constantly pregnant with possibility…” then you ask.. "Why didn’t you rhyme when you wrote that? Wouldn’t it be better with a rhyme? That is a rhetorical question, for the answer is surely: No!" In MY opinion, what is BETTER is in the eye of the beholder to be totally cleche' (I'm sure you dislike that sorry) & I might have rhymed it, I just don't always. I might write “I ramble, … let …words float around us …picking up whatever expression that has found us, we birth them raw, fecund, pregnant with possibility not so much ripe as full rotund I am being flippant now & cheap with something that deserves more respect, just to prove a point I suppose, it matters not, except that I do want to show up that rhyme is no better or worse than non rhymed poetry. I am more in the habit of rhyning, but often write without it too. I am interested in your upper case comment, maybe I have not posted variety enough on this sight for you to see the different aspects of my writing, it's true, I don't like writing "me, me, me" (YOU YOU YOU) oriented works so blatently, but I am fully aware that much of what I write, (or any of us) contain that at some level, I am not sure what you mean by "gloving myself in someone elses dry skin", I could take offense at that, but there is no point, better to enquire as to what it means from you rather than guess & come up with something offensive. The skin I wear is my own though, although perhaps you notice that I do like to shine the light on others if I can, ultimately that makes ME happy so there is a cycle. Anyway, I do think this write was a bit of a throw away, I am not perturbed if you think less of it, I was trying soemthing new, I learned some things, partly from this very interaction, & as always I am grateful for that. I will (I think as a result of this little dance we have done here) try on my writing that is less rhyming, you are the 2nd person to mention it recently, it is worthy of developing so thank you. & thanks also for taking the time here anyway. I hope this is not uncomfortable for you, it isn't for me, I still welcome your comments as ever, though you may feel I am less grateful, I'm not. Cheers .~ Anni ~~~ "Love has no desire but to fulfill itself. To melt and be like a running brook that sings its melody to the night. To wake at dawn with a winged heart and give thanks for another day of loving". ~Kahlil Gibran