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Whispered Musings

At night when all lay fast abed
I listen to noises in my head
Muse has come to sojourn
sometimes bringing a verse to learn

In and round my head she flies
looking at spots on the back of my eyes
Then so suddenly she'll cease
go still quietly in her niche

She'll ponder and plan ,
weave words of beauty
knit songs of duty
caste spells of wonder
twisting them round and asunder

Till all at once she will stare at me
her beautiful words flow in so free

Tendrils of spirit leave her frame
poetry comes to me again
When you wake she'll disappear
She's just been whispering in my ear
 
Whispers aren't always explicit
sometimes i don't hear them ,
and totally miss it
With her wiles I'm seduced around
I listen and hear her faraway sound

Once in her spell the words flow out
Bedazzled I write what its all about
So if you hear your muse is near
Dont give a yell or feel any fear

Shes brought you a gift wrapped with love
And inspired by you know who above ....

— Seren, Apr 25, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Bosscombat

17 years 1 month ago

heya jay-nee

Sittin across from you in the living room writin comments is awesome... This poem is the shiznay! Shibby shibby coconut shibby shibby pie. Rum is awesome :) <3
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

LMFAO !!!!

So glad the rum is making you rock your socks off my darlin LOL !!! And glad you like the poem hun hahahah was composed in the loving walls of your domain ... lmao love and light JayC x x x
professor

professor

17 years 1 month ago

Hi JayC

this is good and i enjoyed it. You do perhaps have a few problems with some of the lines that done flow so well. For example you might be better with: "turning them up, down and asunder" "When you wake she'll disappear She’s just been whispering in my ear" You abandon the rhyme scheme in the last verse which makes it a little uncomfortable. I realise rhyming with "life" is not so easy...perhaps switch the line to "life and love" and it becomes much easier to rhyme with love in the last line. Hope this is of some help BW Keith x
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Thank you

again for having a look I cant sleep so I might play round with it a little see what i cant come up with ... and yeh i did go away from the ryhme scheme at the end I'll see if i can't fix it ... Love and Light JayC x x
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Naylor

17 years 1 month ago

BRAVO !!!

I love this piece JayC !! I love the feeling your words let within me after reading .... WARMTH :) I agree that the last verse may have lost the ryhme but didnt take away from the beauty of your words ((((HUG))))
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Celena(((((((((hugz))))))))

I loved this poem too .. probably cause i wrote it at matty's/Bosscombat ... I was something he said that inspired this poem ... Thank you so much im glad you liked it .. I am only new at this poetry game so any comments even bad ones are helpful especially when your trying to write half decent words LOL ... In poetry and life Love JayC x
Seren

Seren

17 years 1 month ago

Brand New Ending

Here is a brand new ending I hope that you guys like it .... It has a better rhythm now and doesnt go away from the rhyme scheme ... take care much love Jayc x
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Wafi

17 years ago

Muse

JayC, I liked this poem a lot. Nicely written. The way you described it, is awesome. Sincerely, Wafi
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Thanks Wafi :) this ones a

Thanks Wafi :) this ones a favourite of mine as well ... thank you for the five im glad you liked it ... Love and Light JayC x
t. reflexion

t. reflexion

17 years ago

JayC

The muse comes with gift of love and poetry. Well done and best wishes T.
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

thank you soooooooo much

thank you soooooooo much this one is one of my favourites ... glad you enjoyed it friend Love JayC x
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 10 months ago

Oh my god

this is just fantastic, I think probably your best one yet and it also reads like a song. I could feel the vibrations of a musical beat under my feet while reading this wonderful poem. Your No.1 fan :)fleur
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Fleur

This was an older one that i have slowly polished through time and I think I am done with it now LOL I was drinking with Bosscombat in Newcastle when i wrote it was fun one to write we had been talking shit all night you know those nights lol anyways take care glad you enjoyed this one Big hug and Love Jayne x x
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sweetspirit

16 years 10 months ago

I really enjoyed this..the

I really enjoyed this..the way it flowed so easily and use of words just pulled me right in.. Read it about 4 times before I knew it..lol..
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

SweetSpirit

This was an early write of mine that I have cleaned up and worked on here at the site I have been lucky to have some awesome advice I dont think I ahve seen your name here before , so Welcome to the site Hope you enjoy your time here and I am off to go have a read of you ... Big Smile and I am so glad you enjoyed this one .. Regards Jayne x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Grieta

Thank you for the read I am so glad you enjoyed it , my greatest joy in writing is other people enjoying my scribbles Much regard Jayne