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Hold, hold, hold

Star wished sister
capable and fair
ocean diving
sky falling
                    .... hardly even there

Cushioned by the distance
trusting sweet and bold
hold the tiny dew drop

hold
         
        hold

    hold
— Cloudthings, Apr 23, 2009

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Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

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Geezer

Geezer

17 years 1 month ago

Hold,hold, hold.

You are writing them faster than I can comment! I just finished commenting on your last, and went on to another,when low and behold! That is O.K. because I never get tired of seeing your works. I went back and reread this and then went back and gave another star. I love Its' simplicity,yet there is a heartfelt encouragment of a fellow sister. Without a long and meandering message, it surely gives the feeling of care![Kinda like a kiss that just says "I'm here for you".]Gee
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

I write most days, & often I write between 3 & 5 poems or songs

Hi Gee. Thank you, heh, funny, felt like I gave it a break for a day or so so I could catch up on commenting on others. Wasn't enough obviously. Well, I have visitors coming to stay tonight so I doubt I will be able to have any Neo time for nearly 3 day (Oh dear, I shall have withdrawals!). I write most days, & often I write between 3 & 5 poems or songs, in a sitting, most of them never see the light of day, but I am driven to write them anyway, always have been. Yes, I think you summed this one up really well, & thanks fo the lovely message. Take care Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

You, YOU’RE the gem woman,

You, YOU'RE the gem woman, what sweetness, like Gee I love the simplicity, and am awash with gratitude hon, you have been so supportive and understanding of me, and that's all here, along with so much else. I found that quote, the Mandela one, (Marianne Williamson wrote it, really makes me want to get a copy of the book it comes from!) and have printed it off, want to put this one on the wall next to it, it buoys me so! :) You really are an inspiration to me Anni and have brought me much comfort over the last few months, thank you for that and for this! :) That 'tiny dew drop' is so many things to me Anni, my Omi, my sometimes fragile view of myself and who I'm trying to be, the love in my life, the friendship I am cultivating with you and others here, and I will hold on to us all, her, me and you gorgeous, wonderful woman, I will hold in my heart, gently and with much love :) HUGE hugs and more love b xxx
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Anything that is lovely & precious & delicate in you

In Australia, when I was a kid & something pleased us, we always used to simply say... "Oh goody!", it sounds so daggy now, kind of old fashioned & simple, yet when I read what you wrote here it was exactly what I thought, you have completely got the intention of the poem & I am so glad. & look at you, little dew dop nestled in there, precious. I was so hoping you would get the concept of what the dew drop might be... Anything that is lovely & precious & delicate in you, anything that needs to be nurtured. You have it! I have a workbook called "The Artists Way", it requires some active undertakings & committment (eg writting 3 pages of "stream of consciousness" writing every day & doing, or taking yourself to something that feeds your inner Artist, the writer or whatever else in you, once a week), I did it first when Geordi was small, though cheated on some things, eg took him with me on some of the "Artists dates", wrote when I could squeeze it in, not just in the morning. Point is, it had always been hard to care for myself the way I cared for others, that book helped me do that, it made me my own best friend... I still do it & set up little cluster groups to support others doing it, it's such a lovely thing to share. Last year I set up a Facebook page of resources for some friends in different states & countries, though they got slack, the groups work when you meet weekly to keep the momentum up, but the online thing, though a good resource never got off the ground properly... Point is, it is the best way I know to nurture our creative inner being, you might be able to get it from your library, it changed my life that book. Have a look anyway. Oh, the connection here is there is an exercise where you have to write "Treating myself like a precious object will make me strong" & embellish it & make it beautiful, & then put it somewhere you can see it every day. These things would be great for you (or anyone, I think). xxx Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
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meic

17 years 1 month ago

Such elegant brevity

Such elegant brevity deserves a like response. I won't attempt to match, so I'll simply dub this work a poetic gem. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Thanks so much Mike, I love

Thanks so much Mike, I love being so surrounded by so many wonderful writers, & it IS so inspiring. Cheers Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 1 month ago

There they go again Anni

You sky-dive into the blue of shining joys. This is a poem all ages can relate to too, I'll bet your son liked it too? And I can hear the music as its lilt is that of song, although I could be wrong. Just lovely Anni from Ann of Norway
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Thanks lovely Ann, always so generous & your messages full of wa

Thanks lovely Ann, always so generous & your messages full of warmth & encouragement. Adore you, have been so distracted, lots of work & other hings, but must catch up with all your recent works, so love your writes Ann Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
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Arduinna

17 years 1 month ago

absolutely lovely...

so happy to have had the pleasure of reading this soothing and delicate piece.
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Thanks Arduinna, (I do love that name!) Glad you liked it

Thanks Arduinna, (I do love that name!) Glad you liked it, not so common for me to stay on the shorter side of long! I think it would have been wrong to make this longer. Must go look to see what you've been doing. Cheers Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
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Arrow

17 years 1 month ago

My favorite

of your postings. Brief and tender without being flowery. I particularly like the choice of "capable" as it's such a down-to-earth, understated word. Nicely placed on the page. Yes, everything is right.
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

Am greatly inspired by this encouragement, do struggle to be bri

Wow Arrow, I am greatly inspired by this encouragement, I understand your preference, I do find it harder to stay brief (I'm sure you know), but it is such a joy to get the thumbs up from you that I am sure I will make extra effort in the future (chuckle... who says I don't desire positive feedback? hmmm!) Thank you, very glad you enjoyed it, means a lot. Cheers Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
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orgami

17 years 1 month ago

had to stop and re read this

overlooking it at first like hard candy then realizing its defined and beautiful with its deeper harder meaning bridges that are hurricane proof fireproof bolted with secret spanners that no known can undo and sabotage like a secret language awesome yet again and haunting
A

Arrow

17 years 1 month ago

Free associating

to hard candy. The word "capable," which I like so much here is a word I associate with caretakers - mother, father, grandmother, etc. and hard candy is also something I assoicate with them. A meeting of the unconscious minds.
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

associating memory

My great grandfather never let us leave without telling us to take a sweet (always hard ones, in a big jar) I always went for the butterscotch wrapped in gold, such precious little bricks, cheers for jogging that memory :) much love b x
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

you are so dead right, these are the things that keep us resilli

Orgami, you never cease to blow me away with your responses, so often moving me to write to a completely different place. I love it so much, thank you you are an immense inspiration & I feel blessed to have you & all these other wounderous inspiring writers read my work & leave such encouraging feedback. Thank you so much. What you wrote is so beautiful & I can't believe how you see these things, you are so dead right, these are the things that keep us resilliant, that are untouchable when one's heart is broken, these things to fall back on, & you (of course) have described this so very eloquently, as you always do... you are extraordinary Steven. Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 1 month ago

ummmm. quite so, Anni, is

ummmm. quite so, Anni, is not the world reflected in every drop let go? wink. ~A "The way you make love is the way God will be with you." Rumi
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

I almost changed it to "hold the tiny dew drop & then let it go"

Ah beautiful Anna (I fall more in love with these things you write with everything I read of you!). I can't get away with anything with you guys around... sigh... I felt this very same sentiments (though not in such lovely poetic phrasing, beautifully put!)... I almost changed it before posting to ..."hold the tiny dew drop & then let it go" or some such thing, mainly because of that sense of desperation "hold, hold, hold" evokes, but I wanted... but in the end I wanted to give the thing a sense of strength & resilliance, that what you have in the end is what you love & dream of & nothing can take that away... I know in reality these things sit with you without having to be held (anything you have does, or it isn't really "yours", it's like love & btterflies in the open hand)... I will have another think on it though since it also struck me before I walked away from this one as I posted it, might change it if others pick this up too. Thank Anna great to have your wonderful discerning eyes on my work, you always comment so wisely. Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 1 month ago

strengthens the concept of holding onto the gems that have you r

Hey thanks Janice, you're such a sweety... I agree regarding the repetition, it gives it more drama I think, strengthens the concept of holding onto the gems that have you retain your own courage (often the tiny dew drops of lifes dawning), but I also feel in concord with the comment above from Anna, I was torn between these, kept the repetition of hold exactly because of what you have picked up, but had some hesitation about it, because it's true, trying to "Hold onto" things can result in a whole lot of heart ache & to allow life the freedom to be as it is leads to far more harmony (yes, I struggle with this as much as anyone, but I do believe it's true... as I say above, these things we are prepared to set free that stay with us, are the true elements we can call our own). Oooh so much philosophising over so few words!!! Sorry, eating into my brevity! Cheers And thank you Anni ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "...We ask ourselves, who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, and fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? ... Your playing small doesn't serve the world..."