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Solo

A flower in a basket
the sparkle in the stars
my reason for being
is that who you are
my nuance unwaivering
the satisfaction I need
a beginning with no ending
the novelty of my seed
no perfect solutions
line of sight obscured
on the run from myself
imagine me self-assured
I question my lineage
but ready for a change
don't know what I should be
but steady moving that way
should I be your cozy companion
or pick up my guitar and play
lose myself in that raging river
the solo musician
fingering pain
— themoonman, Apr 18, 2009

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 1 month ago

So, when did you become a

So, when did you become a countrywestern singer playing on an ol' blues guitar? Hug. ~A "The way you make love is the way God will be with you." Rumi
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Anna...

Well, I do own a guitar... and can strum a few chords, but cannot really play... my youngest son however, is very good... thanks for reading and commenting... love your butterfly... Richard
yenti

yenti

17 years 1 month ago

Richard

Sounding like you are missing the old days of wanting to know, then change, and change some more, then sit back in the ole chair again, and watch the old movies of when things seemed so good. Liked this piece it had a few messages in there, Yours Ian.T
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Thanks Ian...

and you are right... as we all miss those days sometimes... Richard
professor

professor

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Richard

Anna is right this definitely has a country and western feel but i enjoyed it and especially the somewhat unexpected ending. BW Keith
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Keith...

glad you enjoyed this piece... and thanks for pointing out the ending line... if you knew how many alternate endings there are on this one you would understand my appreciation... thanks Richard
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Julie...

thanks, glad you liked it and any suggestions are more than welcome... it is supposed to get into the eighty's here today, and wouldn't you know, I am sick with a flu-bug... Richard
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meic

17 years 1 month ago

The finale impressed me,

The finale impressed me, too. Certainly the piece does a 'down-home' musical feel to it - most enjoyable, too. Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Mike...

so glad you liked it and even more glad you let me know... appreciate the encouraging words sir... Richard
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leoshelton

17 years 1 month ago

Loved it!

The rhyme and then phase out, but but only enough to absorb the rest of the story telling was great, including the expected/unexpected ending. I like the story that it tells and allows you to insert your own experiences while reading and then leaves you thinking at the end. Enjoyed it a lot! Leo
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Leo...

I appreciate your kind words on this little ol write... thanks. Richard
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orgami

17 years 1 month ago

Solo on the river playing out the pain

yes the old music steel quiver the slide on fret beautifully rendered poem Moonman U Tube always comforts me with its wide track of lost hits the Blue Highway leading on