Our fetid freedom

Dissect and affect,
Smell the smoke
and the distinct disrespect,
Perfect on the edge of the breeze,
Ahhhhh, Suck it in boys,
That there's the smell of the free.

— Bosscombat, Apr 16, 2009

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Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

lol

okay, you know what this reminds me of? and i am sorry if i have found a totally unrelevant view! But, years ago when i was in college.(years ago!) I remember the sweet pungent odor of a little mary jane wafting on the wind on campus. It's distinct odor cause a group of us to look around giggling wondering who was the culprit that would light up a joint there? Probably not as uncommon today! Could be applied to many other aspects tho. like war and remnants of the aftermath. It is one of those little effective poems that gives the reader something to further investigate! Well done, Boss! Always Sincere, Tonya

Bosscombat

17 years 1 month ago

Hey Tonya!

thanks for your comment! lol I was the culprit *insert evil laugh* glad you enjoyed it :) thanks again Bosscombat

Tonya

17 years 1 month ago

hahahaha….hmmmm….somehow,

hahahaha....hmmmm....somehow, that doesn't suprise me, Boss. And I am Totally NOT saying you are disrespectful. well, you could be a little disrespectful of constraints. Most younger ones are, for a while at least. lol Meh, things are a little different nowadays. :)

infinite_dwarf

17 years 1 month ago

Boss

Thank you for giving voice to those who die for our (or other's) freedom. True freedom isn't free. Excellent writing. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Just because you have one, doesn't mean you need to be one..." Doin' a March of Dimes walk 4/26 : http://www.marchforbabies.org/jnj7880

Bosscombat

17 years 1 month ago

hey Jess

no problem :P thank YOU for your feedback and your totally right...freedom isn't free thanks again Bosscombat