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Vampire and the Mist (No. 4 in a Series)

Vampire and the Mist

How do you convey perfection?
Something so right it’s unheard of.
Love so true it’s what fairy tales are based on.
The thing that causes the wrath of demons
Jealous of what they could never have.

Theirs was such a dream come to realization.

The payment was steep that they paid
As the demon reared its evil self to them
While they sat at the lake’s edge
Sharing themselves with each other.

The battle was tortuous and bloody.
He fought for their lives against the fierce demon.
He gave his all to save her.

Fate had been sealed.
The monster held him at bay
As it bit down upon her throat.

The poison coursed through her body and soul.
She burned from the inside out, screaming in pain.
He begged for her, fought for her soul.

The demon put the cards on the table
His life as he knew it for her not to die.

She wailed as he accepted.

Their gaze remained entwined
As he dissolved, becoming a mist.

Blood curling hissing filled the air,
Louder was the laughter of the demon.

The mist filtered around her
While her body turned icy hard.

Their creator stayed to watch
The transformation of perfection
Into less than human nothingness.

The completion of the curse.

A fair maiden no more,
As a new Vampire, she stood tall 
To face the demon with her rage.

The mist gathered between them.

Euphoric with approval of what it had destroyed,
The demon slowly disappeared 

From deep within she hissed,
“Until we meet again…”

Written by Tink 4/12/09 3:40 pm

 

— Tink, Apr 12, 2009

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Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Psst, tink,

l.31: There´s a "she" that crept in. Hope I didn´t mess up my line count and am to blame for this now. Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine nonsense cannot be ruled out.” (Mark Haddon)
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Tink

17 years 1 month ago

oops...

thanks. And thank you! Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 1 month ago

OOOOOOOO Tink!

Again, you wow me with the vampires!!!!!!!!!! I see your muse caught up with you on this one! The trap door under the burgundy rug helped? I found myself speechless by the time I finished reading....you described how the curse came to be and the perfection of the lover's love so vividly...all you wanted to accomplish! You described the pain so intensely too, could almost feel it... Wowie wow wow wow wow! Peace N Love Katie Go Live & Get Rewarded
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Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Tink

here are your stars. Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine nonsense cannot be ruled out.” (Mark Haddon)
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Shadowrose

17 years ago

tink, by all accounts

tink, by all accounts you've awoken the vamp in me once again, you have very vivid precise descriptions for telling the tale, which works great in a story, you could add more flavour to it with a bit of rhythm and word play
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 11 months ago

Vampire in the mist 4

Tink Great Spell binding yet again The innocent young couple in loves throse are stalked by the demon who waited until they were lost in each other before he tore the lovers apart. The power he had took the fair maiden holding her love at a distance unable to help his maid though he battled long hard and strong. The demon sank his fangs deep into her long slender china white skin until the red river starts to flow and the lover watches in horror unable to move only to see his fair maid transform into the seductive servant of the demon. Just love this I am hooked on every word every image created WOW. Electric Blue
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Dalton

16 years 7 months ago

Dalton to Tink

Loved this one will definitely read more of your work. It reminds me of Clive Barker my first and favourite writer of his genre. Love and respect Dalton.
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Tink

16 years 7 months ago

Dalton,

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I hope you will visit the rest of the series. What a compliment to be compared to Clive Barker! Thank you. Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink