Linda Moses

Apr 12, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Return Of The Moon Babies

The moon is full and once again
The Moon Babies have come out to play
Just how they get here, no one can say

Their fair, fair hair is covered with stardust
And the twinkle of the stars fills their eyes
Their little white bodies glow in the moonlight

As they run about with such delight
They must slide down the moonbeams
To the earth below at midnight

And then their games begin
Hiding amongst the shadows of the leaves
Covering their giggles behind small hands

Jumping and splashing in the drops of dew
The game of hide and seek begins anew
1,2,3, I see you, you know I do

Gleefully they play the night away
While you and I sleep in the night's sway
They play their game as they

Softly sing out to one another
Now don't you peek. 1,2,3
Come find me

— Linda Moses, Apr 12, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: rethinking this. have recently started reading the works of some of the greats, I will comment later

Critiques

Rett

17 years 1 month ago

Linda

I absolutely adore this. the only problem I have is here with the repeat of away... Gleefully they play the night away While you and I sleep the night away I dunno should be another word to fit. will think on it. Other than that I think it works extremely well and the concept is pure magic. 4/5 Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

Linda Moses

17 years 1 month ago

Rett

I was a little unsure of using 'away' in both lines, but I decided it would work, but I did change it as there were 2 comments about the use of this word twice. Ink liked it, and in a way I still do. But I am always open to suggestions for improvement. thank you, Rett Sincerely, Linda

Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Linda,

are we poets all being "lunatic"? I love the image of the moon babies, and how you describe their game of hide and seek here. Please check your spelling in l.7 ("the"->"they"?) again. Lines 3 and 12 are still a little rough, I think. May I suggest "Just how they get here, no one can say" as an alternative for l.3 and "stifling their giggles behind small hands" for l.12? Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine nonsense cannot be ruled out.” (Mark Haddon)

Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

How funny is this?

Simultaneous posting with Rett! His comment prompts me to add that I quite liked the repetition of "away". Again, ~Nina

Linda Moses

17 years 1 month ago

Ink

I used your suggestion "just how they get here, no one cay say" as I do like it better than the way I had it. I corrected the typo "the" "they" I am still considering the word 'stifling' It feels to me a harder word, (for lack of a better way to say it)I was looking for a softer word.) Thank you for your help it is appreciated. Sincerely, Linda

Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Linda,

how about "hiding their giggles behind small hands"? I know what you mean about "stifling" sounding a little too harsh. Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine nonsense cannot be ruled out.” (Mark Haddon)

Linda Moses

17 years 1 month ago

Nina

I finallly decided on 'covering', as 'hiding' was used in line before. Maybe I will think of a different word before it is all over. I do appreciate your comments and help Linda

Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Linda,

I completely forgot to leave you my rating. Even though I think that there may still be an alternative for "covering" coming, you have definitely done a great job on this one! And now it isn´t working. Grr! Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine nonsense cannot be ruled out.” (Mark Haddon)

yenti

17 years 1 month ago

Moonbeams

Well we are all on the same beam on this one as I had copied that line, and then read the Comments of Rett and the Lady Dragon. Had put another bit of line in there to keep us asleep lol While you and I sleep (the night away)---in the nights sway Did say I had done it, hopes this is a line to help ??? I love your Moon Babies reminds me of the Clangers they live out there also. Yours with respect, Ian.T

Linda Moses

17 years 1 month ago

Ian

"In the night's sway" does work nicely, and I thank you for the suggestion. I did change the line. What is a Clanger? Thank you, Linda

yenti

17 years 1 month ago

Linda

The Clangers are little creatures that live on a lump of rock out in space, it is a childrens animated programme, quite simular to the Wombles, but these haven't much on their rock, a music tree and a soup dragon that gives them food from a cave, cannot remember all of it, but even as young as I am their simplicity was a beauty, you being so young, you have missed such a lot LOL, The Golden Key, the main charactor Sadie who looks after the children if they have problems on the spirit side, well one of the girls that went over there, all she wanted to do was make Rainbows, Sadie looked after her and found her Grandmother to come and fetch her. Before she left, she made a beautiful Rainbow for the childrens play area, it stretches over the waterfall there, now they have made steps up one side of the rainbow so that the children can climb up and then slide down the other side there they fall into a big chest that sends out love and happiness as they drop into it, but that's another story from my Sadie La La, you have a lovely day, each day, Yours Ian.T

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 1 month ago

Awwwwww

I LOVE this one!!!! Poems about the moon or like always attract me! This one is just brilliant, beautiful imagery of the Moon Babies, so childish and curious and magical! *sigh* Peace N Love Katie Go Live & Get Rewarded

Linda Moses

17 years 1 month ago

Katie

Thank you so much for your comments. The original Moon Babies was written for my 7 year old granddaughter on her birthday last August. Linda

infinite_dwarf

17 years 1 month ago

Moon Babies rule!

This was just so adorable, I couldn't help but smile. "As they run about with such delight They must slide down the moonbeams To the earth below at midnight" - my favorite stanza, as the image was just way cool. The only thing I didn't really like was the double 'fair' in fair, fair hair. To me, one fair sufficed, but no one else mentioned it, so it's just me. BTW.... do you think the craters are from their trampolines? :~) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Just because you have one, doesn't mean you need to be one..." Doin' a March of Dimes walk 4/26 : http://www.marchforbabies.org/jnj7880

Linda Moses

17 years 1 month ago

Jess

Hi, how have you been. Moon craters from their trampolines? That's funny, I hadn't thought of that. Thank you for reading. Linda

Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Ok, Linda,

have figured out how to get those stars to you now. Yours, ~Nina “Like plumbers and dentists, poets are fallible, and the possibility of genuine nonsense cannot be ruled out.” (Mark Haddon)