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Apr 12, 2009
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Bursting
There's this tsunami of toys
cataclysmic noise
and I'm deafened
it shouts life into me
and my eardrums burst
with the love of her
There's this rainbow of colour
heavenly light
and I'm blinded
it shines life into me
and my eyes burst
with the love of her
There's this river of peace
angelic presence
and I'm drowning
the life flows into me
and my heart bursts
with the love of her
— faerybeki, Apr 12, 2009
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Critiques
Cloudthings
17 years 1 month ago
I like the way there is such flow & repitition in the stanzas
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Hi Anni, just replied to you
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
PS.
Cloudthings
17 years 1 month ago
Rest assured we love what you are doing, you must know that by n
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Hey Anni, my need for
Cloudthings
17 years 1 month ago
I think we all have a fair bit of tolerence & generosity here
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
permission and forgiveness :)
Shonna James
17 years 1 month ago
Love, love, love it.
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Hi Shonna, thank you so much
Ink Dragon
17 years 1 month ago
Beki,
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Hi Nina, wil have to look up
Craig Norris
17 years 1 month ago
Hiya Bek
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Thanks Craig, for your read,
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
:)
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Hooray! Thank you :) Just
themoonman
17 years 1 month ago
Beki...
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Richard, thank you so much
orgami
17 years 1 month ago
Took the time
faerybeki
17 years 1 month ago
Thanks O for your comment, I