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Dying Race


 

Slipping down the passage of time

I spied an ancient porcupine

He said his spines had grown too old

And soft to use as swords so bold                   

 

His wrinkled brow, his strange long tail   (I know he aint got one!)

Were only vestiges of what they were

His pride and joy, his well formed toes

Were all that's left he said, who knows

 

What will become of me in time

When I have left this era, mine

And wandered out among the stars

To make strange puzzles next to Mars

 

Oh there, you see, just to the right

Is porcupine constellation bright

He fought so boldly with all his might

And now is famous in his plight

 

Oh porcupine, oh porcupine

Why did they have to go

The world is such a chaste old place

Without the likes of you, you know

 

Come back and change the wings of chance

And do again your magic dance

Your swords across your back and thighs

We'll drink to you, for you were wise


 



— Nordic cloud, Apr 08, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Ann, extinction is a sad

Ann, extinction is a sad thought indeed but your poem is delightful :) there's a real gentleness to the rhythm and the rhyme, I love it! Bless you and this porcupine. Much love b x
yenti

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

Ann of Norway

Poetess of the porcupine, I am sad I didn't write this rhyme, It tells of creatures that are old, but near to extinction as I'm told, a constellation we now see, There in a space of time to be, Oh porcupine save a space for mine, I wonder what we will call it in time, as extinct mankind becomes, maybe if it is there soon to see, we can call it "Tried 2 B" LOL. A good piece of writing there young Ann you take care out there, Yours, "Ian.T of Spirituality" PS:- Now Smile again, La, La, La,
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Oh how lovely

To have inspired you to rhyme Ian, in your comment to my porcupine. Thank you. Oh I do wonder what you mean by take care, my mind is so full of imagination that I can at once conjure up all sorts of fantastic things to take care of, or perhaps you meant myself, I sometimes wonder if I should take more care of others less fortunate than myself as I have a guardian angel looking after me, I seem to come out of scrapes unscathed. When I was thirty, when others tend to say oh wow I am getting old, I had a different view, I was so excited that I was still alive and not only that but had all my limbs so far unbroken; to think that I have lived so many years and am as whole as I was before. 2 years later I had a non malignant cyst, and 20 years later colon cancer, but I am still whole and happy. Ann of Norway