Crusty Cliche's

Sounds as though you've been having a bad day,moonman! I guess that we all have them,but you have voiced them so well, that the one I was planning to write,just doesn't seem necessary now. I'm not sure that I could do any better. 5 stars! Beauty is still a matter of perception. gee

this, to me, is a series of cliches and innuendos stringed together. i'm not sure what a line drive is, but i know that baseball season just started. it all gives a feeling of missing the mark, so to speak. the narrator is not what he/she once was, or could be. he?she is inept and left to themselves to realize how much there situation stinks (presented in a literal fashion). my first impression was that this was about lost dreams, growing older. but it's more about not fitting into the skin you wish you had, and that's a feeling that's ageless and timeless. we put ourselves to shame. -sha

this tragedy made me smirk. I didn't really interpret it as a bad-day-grumbling, I think the write had comical aspect, for example Can’t catch me I’m missing the bases oh, that evokes such a hilarious picture in my head.... my moonman, I am sorry, if your pen has not been dipped in humor, then I completely misinterpreted this piece. but I loved it all the same!!! keep up the wonderful WONDERFUL work! your Proprietress

This gave me a chuckle. I liked the line about the bent hanger in the closet take off the paper (skin) and see. How very true for some of us. Can't catch me I am running the bases Yea! Not hitting the bases but running just as well. Reminds me of an old song, Oh yea life goes on, long after the thrill of living is gone. I think we all have those bad days. This was very much filled with humor and I enjoyed it. Patty throws the ball over the catchers head.

Perfectly crafted poem mate. Had a shitty day? Im glad im not the only one who swears in their work haha I was begining to think I was. Anyways top work brother! Kudos! Bosscombat

At least you caught the ball.... I'm the poor sot whose legs it goes through! Or it pops out of my glove and smashes me in the face! I feel bad laughing at your poem, but just the way you phrased some of it was hilarious. Here's hoping to a better day tomorrow. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"You can be a dreamer, you can be your dreams come true. Just let imagination lead, reality will follow through." - Michael Hedges

has put you into a certain mood. The way you have strung your crusty cliché’s together is priceless though. I think we laugh, because we can relate and reflect on times we have had similar feelings. (and, some of the pictures our brains form when reading are quite humorous) But, you know what? I believe the ability to laugh at ourselves is one of our best weapons in life! Loved the poem Moonman. :) Keep on smiling, we are all in the same pot! Always Sincere, Tonya

I enjoyed this one, too. To be able to laugh at your self is great. to recognize your own good qualites, somehow to me has always been hard ' Linda

Loved the poem! SO I sat down a read a few of your poems (which were very good), and since you appear to be a more experienced writer I will offer some criticism. (tell me to shut up if it is unwanted...i won't be offended lol) Though all the comparisons are quite strong...I almost think the poem would have been more powerful if you just stuck with one (ex: elaborated on why else you compare yourself to the bent hanger OR elaborated on why else you are the short stop but not both) Both were strong enough to carry a full poem on their own. OR at least that's my opinion. Regardless the poem was great. and as a side note...I keep all my bent hangers because I always end up using them for something else. so in a weird way...my bent hangers are more useful.

Thank's for the laugh Moon this is hilarious!! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous