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Craig Norris
Apr 09, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

beyond eternity

Dolphins dive within the surf
and those who've slipped the bonds of earth
soar beside the cumulus
on slender wings, light and swift.

Tucked turned danced with lift
within this craft created riffs
risen sere above the clouds
to leave below all face and shroud.

I've heard the music call to me
from out beyond eternity.
Slipped outside this bodies bounds
Pipers call,majestic sounds. 

Sight of golden shore of clouds
has caught me, made me cry out loud
so this never ending score
plays soft, plays now for ever more.

This music takes my soul in it
engulfs me with a perfect fit
sends my body back to earth
while some thing of it is worth

Stands me out upon the ground
Tunes my ears for the sound.
I've heard the music call for me
from out beyond eternity.

  


 

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faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 1 month ago

My! Aren’t you on a roll?!

My! Aren't you on a roll?! ;) Loved this one Craig, great rhythm and rhyme, I feel gently rocked by it's lullaby-like nature! Beautiful imagery too! Another fab write form you Mr Norris! much love b x
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Craig Norris

17 years 1 month ago

Beki Baby

Hey, Thanks for the compliments Beki, I think what has happened with this poem is that it needs to be read aloud to work. So I'm not real sure about it, but anyway, it came from a good place, somewhere...out there. CraigAKACHUCKNorris
Rett

Rett

17 years 1 month ago

Craig

Man, This was smooth as silk until this line "ears tuned for the sound,". To me it begged for two more syllable although on re-read it worked fine, it still seemed to sound better with something like "ears tuned for the slightest sound," but what the heck, either way works and I really enjoyed sailing on this one, It carried me along like a sailboat cutting through gentle waves. Excellent! Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
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Craig Norris

17 years 1 month ago

Hey Rett

Thanks for the comments, I wasn't real happy with this either in spots, and one of them was the one you mentioned. So it's had a bit of attention. I'm starting to recognize a bit of a pattern here, it takes me a few adjustments to get things sorted. Cheers craigAKACHUCKNorris
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poewriter58

17 years 1 month ago

Craig

Perhaps "this music takes this soul into it would work in here" I must agree with Rett here a couple of syllables would make the difference. But again it is your write and such an enjoyable one at that. Chrys "Go live and be rewarded"
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Craig Norris

17 years 1 month ago

Yep couldn't agree more

Hi Chrys, thanks for the comments, I think I probably post my stuff too early, cause I'm often caught making edits. I've changed a little bit more than a couple of syllables and I think it runs a bit better. Cheers craigAKACHUCKNorris
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Arduinna

17 years 1 month ago

lovely...

this piece gave me such an airy feeling...beautiful.
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Craig Norris

17 years 1 month ago

Hi Arduinna

Thanks for your response, so much, and happy that it worked for you...somehow on some level. I'm starting to think it's a bit too sacharine, but there you go. Cheers craigAKACHUCKNorris