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Denial Lives Divine

You want to destroy yourself,
And I say that's fine,
Clench your fist, and storm the hills (!),
Shame... to think you have a spine!?
To think you've got the courage,
the tenacity or volition,
Is this what you had in mind?
Inside... denial lives divine.

You talk and talk and talk some more,
So much I refuse to listen,
Too self righteous yet too self loathing,
And purely lacks real vision,
You say you can't help yourself,
Cmon! No more indecision,
We all need to hear it
But with conviction and precision.

Now! I'm a reasonable man
And I want you to talk true
Be concise and be forthright
make it hard for me to misconstrue
you say you've suffered enough
That's not up to me to choose
But I say with angered tone
your debts are vastly overdue.
— Bosscombat, Apr 07, 2009

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yenti

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

Boss

I would hate to be the other person in that piece, it is a piece written as the world is today and is great, we all miss a thorn that is taken out of our finger, but we still remember the time it was there, but not for that long as the pain subsides and the healing takes place, it is gone as the wind of yesterday, but when dealing with other souls there is a difference in that their actions are not our responcibility and we cannot change most of them, but to hold out a hand in love no matter what, that is what is missing in this world today, I would love to read something along those lines as a Second chance to the one above, written by you as you can relate to that piece,Yours Waiting, Ian.T
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Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

hey Ian

Thanks for your comment and the suggestion...sounds like a good idea (to write a poem about giving second chances). And yeh I agree with what you said. I do think people are to quick to anger, but that been said I also believe our anger is a gift and should be expressed as such. There's a lot of people unfortunatly who bite the hand that shows them love...and one of those people this poem is aimed at. They are long past second chances but ill soldier on and try and write the poem as requested haha Thanks again. Much appreciated as always :) Bosscombat
Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Mattyyyyyy

Another awesome write .... i agree with all ian has said up there couldnt say it any better :) ... ill sit and wait with Ian LOL ;) Luvluv JayC x x x
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Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

hey jay-nee

Lol thanks hun, I will start this other poem but it might be a while in the making...gotta be objective haha so you and ian make yourselves comfy! Haha hurry up and get snake and yourself better so you guys can come hang here! Thanks again hun apprieciate it alot <3
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R.T.

17 years 2 months ago

Loving the flow

I love the flow. I could almost see this made into a rap song. After I read this I am left wondering to whom the person is in debt to... himself? the speaker? the world? I think there could be logical reasons for any of these, which makes your poem open to the readers interpretation. I like that. I am, however, confused by these lines: "Shame… to think you have a spine!? To think you’ve got the courage," I feel they diverge from the purpose of the rest of the poem. (or I am reading them incorrectly)! That's all, You have a gift, R.T.
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Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

Hey R.T

Thanks a lot for your comment. I did kinda wanna leave the poem open for interpretation. And those two lines... im not sure how your reading them or even if I wrote them to make sence... "shame... to think you have a spine" supposed to mean the speaker is saying shame on himself to think that this other guy has balls. when I read that part those 3 or 4 lines are read quite quickly, maybe that might help. Thanks again fot your comment I really apprieciate it! Bosscombat