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The Moon and Sun

The dawn re-appears and aims it's slicing colors and sharp hues 
towards the execution and demise of the moon,
for simply trying to imitate it's brilliance.

The Sun means not, to be harsh...but their differences are,
like Night and Day.....but, it's too bad, for the Moon
as it tries different sizes and angles,

but it's light cannot compare to that of the Sun's.
It is really quite unfair, for the Moon doesn't own much light at all;
and so, I feel sorrow for the Moon, and it's failures.

For, it is I who resembles the Moon,
and cannot compare because my light constantly "flickers",
like a candle in the wake of a passerby.

For, I am all three...the candle, the flickering flame, and the passerby
because, I am but a pedestrian compared to you,
and I die just a little when I'm allowed to see your light.

However, I also do see my flame growing,
making up for things slowly but surely;
for, this much I know 'ti's true, I am the Moon.....but you my dear, are the Sun.
— docmaverick, Apr 07, 2009

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Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

wow

dont have the words to say how much this touched me ... really beautiful ... the stars fell down and formed a crown :) Sincerely JayC
B

Bell

17 years 2 months ago

This hit me

I have been working on concepts of borrowed light from the sun and this is an entirely different perspective, and yet the truth behind this is gripping. I really enjoyed this. Bell
yenti

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

Doc

It's been a journey to this point, and still a way to go, but the love and undestanding of the ways that have been your companions since time began, are showing through and will be loved by all, A lovely piece there, Yours Ian.T
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 2 months ago

I'm trying sooo hard....

...to live up to the title of "poet", sometimes I get lost in the letters and vowels, while trying to form my ideas with the words. I thank you all for your more than generous comments. Your responses truly give me a piece of "Hope's Pie". Thanks... #{:>{)]@=== docmaverick.