Tonya

Apr 06, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Breakable

I swore I would not leave,Loves ties were much too strongWith so many open woundsI’m finding I was wrong There was a spoken promiseForever, this was the place to staySo many painful thoughtsKeep getting in the way Yea, I’m breakableI believe you nowI’m breakable Thought that you were different,Seeing other things that no one seesReading all the signs‘Specially those stuck in-between the seams Yea, I’m breakableI believe you now Never did I feel a twinge of foolishnessWhen I expressed myself to youSeemed you understood meThought I knew you too… Yea, I’m breakable…..

— Tonya, Apr 06, 2009

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orgami

17 years 2 months ago

woa cool poem Tonya

gotta be this spring weather snow soon summer just wrote a poem love the passion in your poem the gravity the brevity about the issue of hearts wow i really liked reading that! amazing~

Tonya

17 years 2 months ago

Thank you much, Orgami

sometimes, people tell you they are bad.. will hurt you. And then they do. Was told you could only forgive them so much before there would be nothing left... but, we heal. This was a little mix of this and that thrown into the pot and i suppose, this was the dish it made. lol. I read your last.... i am musing that one over, don't know i trust my senses right now to respond to.. how to say it.. 'i guess wild roaring passion of sorts..' i best think on it a bit more. (really liked it though. the words will come soon) Take care, temptation has great cost. Always Sincere, Friend. Tonya

orgami

17 years 2 months ago

Tempation requires much but we buy it with pennies of our soul

sometimes like the great Achilles fools such as I are want to follow our helena's (Im sure Troy would be interesting the first time round face down But after the twenty ninth??) still cant deny its here those vixen eyes but no In truth not worth it glad you liked the poem though sometimes its nice to write something stirring and exciting I really enjoyed reading your poem too Thats what poetry is about!!

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

loved it

just found this little pearl .... :) Sincerely JayC

Tonya

17 years 2 months ago

thank you Seren

I'm so glad you liked it and took time to stop by! Always Sincere, Tonya

professor

17 years 2 months ago

True love ties are indeed

very strong Tonya and vulnerable at the same time. Generally when someone tells you they will end up hurting you it is because they are simply unable to commit at the same level but for those of us who can, hope springs eternal that you can change them. As you say though there comes a point when simply too much damage gets done and you end up breaking into little pieces. Your poem expresses this very well i must say. And of course you will end up out there trying again because that is the way you are and love is too important to miss out on. So good luck to you. BW Keith

Tonya

17 years 2 months ago

Keith,

I think you hit the nail on the head. Commitment, such a big scary word for some. and changing..yes, we try to conform people to our way of thinking a lot of the time, insteading of just accepting them as they are. When the two ideologies collide, usually much trouble erupts. Thank you for your thoughtful response. and for the record, lol, i've been married to the same great guy going on 28 years this fall. But, bits and pieces from our past linger and mesh with things we feel and see and gather from many different sources these days. Thanks again, i appreciate your time and imput. Always Sincere, Tonya

Tonya

17 years 2 months ago

Life is full of what ifs

and notions laid aside for actually, better things. The sincerity is there, so thanks for seeing that. Is funny, i usually tend to go overboard with my descriptions (my son tells me i am adjective happy!) i thought plain, simple was better here. And things are good here :) I am a lucky woman, and i know it! Thank you so much for reading and I am really glad you enjoyed the piece. Always Sincere, Tonya

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

Tonya

A beutiful write on such a painful reality, these views as best when looked at with a distance between them, it is a failing of ours when it is said that something is not good, then stupid us have to go and try it to see if our friends are telling it true. Then it is one of the hardest things for someone to do, is get away, then have the wisdom not to repeat the cycle again. You Take care and know that out there are many people that have many lovely feelings for others that are true, I hope this was not of you in those words??? Yours Ian.T

Tonya

17 years 2 months ago

;) well, could have been, i will refrain from

totally giving myself away! lol. Thank you Ian for your comments, and yes, we can all be a little dense and not take warnings when we should. 'Til we are in to deep and carry our scars away with us. I am so glad you liked the poem. There are so many excellent writers on this site, i feel priviledged to participate with you guys! Thank you again, Always Sincere, Tonya

Arrow

17 years 2 months ago

Song-like.

Doesn't sound like the speaker's breakable. Sounds like the ties of an illusion of love have been broken, esp. in stanzas 1 and 2. *‘Specially those stuck in-between the seams" - great line I like the use you've made of your refrain, shortening it to the final, piercing point. I think you need Patty Loveless singing this.

Tonya

17 years 2 months ago

hahaha

Arrow, do you have her number? Cut thee ties before thee break beneath the weight of painful ache the heart doth give to bend and swell from the blows and damage that it endures lest once to often thee recieve a wound leading thy heart to its loveless doom. ah, lol, i am glad you liked the poem thank you so much for your comments and for reading. Always Sincere, Tonya

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Tonya...

I loved your poem... I'd like to share what I took from this piece... isn't it interesting how once it's out there, it can be taken so many ways... Breakable... to me it was finding out how breakable the human spirit is, for anything, including relationships. To me it delivers a moment of self-realization, and wisdom of how even the perfect mate, is never quite perfect... after all, we are each one human, and so damn breakable... Richard

Tonya

17 years 2 months ago

Richard

Thank you so much. I love the fact you told me what you found in the words. Of all the things that i enjoy in my writing and getting the feed back, that is one thing i really cherish. Sometimes what the reader is gleaning, may or maynot be what the writer intends, but the fact they got something and are willing to share that, is priceless. I believe you are right also. We can reach out in so many different ways, do so many different things, and find we are breakable, not impervious to anything, after a point. I am really happy you enjoyed the write. Glad to see you back also. Haven't seen you much after your whippoorwill poem, (which I loved!) but, i have been unable to look too much lately. :) Watch out tho..am on the mend! lol Always Sincere, Tonya