Cloudthings

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I drink the loveliness of kindness born of emptiness

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I kiss you with this interval between the notes

I kiss you with the pause and then the sigh

I kiss you with the bending through the minor 6th

I kiss you, laser pin point, eye to eye

The spotlight drowns the faces

I search the distant spaces

and bend these melodies while singing blind

You’re only silhouette inside me

I need nothing now to hide me

Love is sweeter harmonies, not yet confined

I place these wishes on the morning star that carries hope

I place these hopes upon the promises of faith

I place this faithfulness beyond the truths of any tongue

I place this living truth on gambling floors of deaths pale careless wraith

I sing for sweeping boundaries

Hearts melted in harsh foundries

I only wished to bring more joy and care

If anybody found me

I pray they might just ground me

And one day I might awake to find me there

I drink the overburdened dreams of strangers touching me

I drink the weeping scars of histories denied

I drink the loveliness of kindness born of emptiness

I drink the saltiness of drops slipped from my eyes

So loop the melodies around me

Peace, with time, has almost found me

You used to hold me in your word beyond the sun

Always distant by the stars

Tough to steely in your scars

You toyed with me, and said I’d be the one

I let you take me when the moon was drawn to kiss the earth

I let you take me when the milk was melted dreams

I let you take me when the sunrise offered Avalon

I let you take me though the boat had lost its sea

And you so lost to me

— Cloudthings, Apr 03, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

Critiques

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Ooops doubled up when I fixed a typo!

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

the kisses being metaphor for what I want to give out I guess

Hi, thanks Asi, yes, there's lots in here, in the beginning I was just thinking about the people in the audience, the kisses being metaphor for what I want to give out I guess... & lots more, but unfortunately my last love wound keeps creeping in any chance it can, so there's a bit of that... almost gone, wish it would disapear & scar up faster, it's annoying to have it keep harrassing my writing! (least it isn't ugly & painful as it used to be). Are you new here, must go look at your work? Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Anni, this is beautiful! and

Anni, this is beautiful! and so are you my friend. you got me welling up, yet again!! for me there is nothing wierd here, it is stunning :) much love and more apologies for not writing more, hope to pop in again tonight and already looking forward to reading this again xx

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

I hope you still aprove, since I've actually changed some bits

Hey, my "dog licked darlin'" don't ever feel you need to apologise for being succinct... I DO know it takes time to check in on folk here, I really understand, & besides what you write is so lovely, thank you. I hope you still aprove, since I've actually changed some bits to have it a little harsher & more ouchy slightly (in my mind anyway, less dreamy & vague... but I think it's a better work... I had an awful time editing, it kept doubling the work & losing the first line & I couldn't get rid of it, very frustrating... think it's ok now though.) Hope all is well... good girl for cleaning your bathroom, I should be scrubbing my bath (& my dog) but I am here instead, very wicked!!! So loved your last!!! Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Anni, I don’t know what

Anni, I don't know what you did in editing but it reads even betterer ;) now! Such feeling resonates from your poetry and such emotion, I love it, I feel it. Especially liked the fourth ( I think, I can't see the poem anymore :)) stanza, how the hope carries on and the faithfullness and truth carry on to the next lines. Just one thing for me (and I hope I get it right, will check in a min to be sure) maybe drop the 'd' on 'hoped to bring care' line, only because I feel this is something you do all the time, when you write and comment, and obviously when you sing and therefore for me could be hope? I Hope it's ok to say this hon? I'm sure it is and you are welcome to ignore me anyway :) Great changes (what ever they were:)) I still love it! I did clean the bathroom, not that you'd know it now, toddlers! ;) she can undo in 5mins what it takes me hours to accomplish!! hope your boy's arm bit better and was glad to hear it wasn't too serious. Much love b xx

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

SHOULD be sleeping but it's been DAYS! since I had a Neo hit!

Hi sweet, thanks you ARE such a gusher, hah, so glad I'm not the only one! Nice to be cascaded ta. The changes removed the personal a little for me (hard thing for me to do, I get so attached to my babies), but it does read better, can't remember what they were eaxactly, but if you really wanted to check there is an edit review process somewhere or just let me know I'll try to dig up the orig. Just arrived home from a few days away & the festival I was doing the Artistic direction for, & some performances & a little time with my scientist & our kids which was full of gorgeous surprises, wonder & devastating honesty... life is incredibly full, but lovely... I am completely exhausted, but I need to see just a little Neo before sleeping (sigh I drove around 650 kilometres just today, SHOULD be sleeping), it's been DAYS! since I had a Neo hit! I like the 4th stanza best too, so I'm glad you do, I like the way I was able to connect all those little attributes together so they ran from one line to another like a gradiated waterfall gently pooling & then flowing over to the next phase below. I can't read it right now either, & have'nt for a while so I can't say exactly what was the intention, but I think the hopeD, was a reference to a circumstance where I felt I blew it even though that was the thing I HAD hoped to bring, it became something less worthy... but I will go back & look it may be another case of having to "kill my babies off" as that awful saying goes, to make it read better, though it feels like I'm prostituting my art to change it too much, it wouldn't be my story any more, it would be a bunch of words to suit someone else... not sure how much we should fold on our original sentiment... I guess we just have to choose. Happy clean bathroom honey, how nice! Always good to hear from you xx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

So beautiful!

What an astounding write, so deep and touching. At first it came across as a romantic mushy type poem, but to read further it is obviously sooooooo much more. You weave your words so stunningly...this is the first piece I think I've read of yours, and I love what I'm seeing! The greatest pieces are the weird ones that "just fall out of you"...certain moments are poetic ones, and I have a few that are a menagerie of all things within. A stunning piece! Peace and Love Katie

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Odd, everything seems to be doubling for me today!!

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

been sleep deprived lately, had less inclination to write- unusu

Thanks Katie, wow, that's really some praise, I have been so sleep deprived lately I have even had less inclination to write (HIGHLY unusual for me) & it was so delicious when this one just slipped & slithered its way onto the screen. Yes, I've read some of yours & really enjoyed them, I'm pretty sure I commented, usually do, will go back & check when I finish here. Cheers woman! & thanks again. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Oh Anni you and Longo

Fair wring the heart out and expect us to stand up and criticise the words of wisdom and joy, what can we utter but amazed recognition of genius and the power to move mountains. I can say no more or it would be overdone!!!!! Love this Anni love from Ann

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thank you dear one - trying to be as graceful as possibile

My dearest Ann, you are sooooo in my heart, I do so love to see your lovely smiling icon on my pages, & always such high praise... Ahhhh ... well, you know I accept it, trying to be as graceful as possibile (a lesson given I feel so in admiration of your own work my friend & I would hate it if you tried to deny my adoration therein!) Still, I have changed some bits here & there, it has a bit of a different message (I am getting bolder changing my babies for better fluidity & reading ease for others, guess that's what this is about)... so I hope you still find it worthy. Take care dear Ann xxx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

orgami

17 years 2 months ago

I can hear a piano score playing low melodic distant

your writing is mysterious wonder sliding like glass blues on seasoned Gibson like Steinway and brothers baby grand One movie I watched and loved was called "1900" starring Mr Roth hes awesome Rammstein does a song from a movie clip I think of Chet Baker Bix Biderdex Robert Johnson Roy Orbisons "In Dreams" dedicated to his wife whom he lost in a motorcyle crash (they were riding on two bikes) yet hope rides free swooping like a thin winged glider (they do look like Gary Powers U-2 reconnaisance aircraft) your spirit is magical Anni forged from those fires where hearts were melted down for vanities for egos for gossip Hans Christian Anderson was a favourite read of mine for awhile The tin soldier and the ballerina The match girl The little Chimney Sweep The little Mermaid your poems are beautiful creations crafted of words I've never read anything like them in years I love everyone elses poems too here but Im honest in telling that as people are saying they are my Fans I believe I can say I am a fan our yours also here Australlia sounds like a spiritual place Spiritual I havent gone to sit on a rock outlook or quiet place for some time drifting here and of course five stars (if I comment on anyones I give them five stars because they deserve it) we need poets more then ever!!

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

our little band of mutual admirers, full of rich integrity & gen

Dearest O', you blow me away every time you comment! Your comments praise my work & yet within them your brilliance shines SOOO brightly. YOUR words perfect star bright icons of nobility placed like haloed angels - not the cheap copies, the silent reverent power houses winged & wise. Your praise is almost too intense to comprehend from one I admire so hugely. I bow & try to receive reverently an honour I must breath into... slowly. Thank you for your very beautifully crafted support & praise O', I know what you mean, there are many really wonderful writers here... But somehow you know me at a different level for all that our lives would never touch, & stem from completely different places.. you know something I don't feel I openly express anywhere, yet you weave the threads & find the source... Here.... "your writing is mysterious wonder sliding like glass blues on seasoned Gibson like Steinway and brothers baby grand" & here.... "your spirit is magical Anni forged from those fires where hearts were melted down for vanities for egos for gossip" ...especially. You know some of the unknown backdrops in my psyche, there are a myriad of course, (as in your own mind, the unfolding of which I simply adore), Of course I also love all the rest as well, these things you write, so sustaining & inspiring. I am so glad we are beyond the vanities of ego & the gossip... our little ethereal band of mutual admirers here, so full of rich integrity & generosity, wanting only to enjoy each other & support & grow our skills & beings. It is a good place, a little haven. Thank you hugely for your beautiful words... Of course I am a fan of yours, I think that's obvious... I love your work enormously. Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Edited & changed a bit

It has a slightly altered sentiment now, hope that doesn't disapoint, For most of you my day is your night, so you see these while I sleep, I should know by now to sleep on these works before submitting perhaps, since I am just learning I can change them, it's still new. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Inspiration

This little poem is so beautifully writen ... As a singing teacher you relly grabbed my attention with all the music ref's ...Sometimes I am wordless , this is one of those times ... Well done ... Sincerely JayC x

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks JayC, how funny I am also a singing teacher!!!

Thanks JayC, how funny I am also a singing teacher!!! & I perform, you probably do as well... This really began about how I prefer to reach people when I sing, the kiss thing not being actual kisses, but a way of reaching intimately to those listening to the song. Anyway, thanks again & smiles. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Very Small world

Big Smiles back @ you Anni ... I dont teach anymore I mainly perform these days though the last 12 months due to ill health I havn't been able to do that either .. but such is life .. After reading more of your work I can see the music in your words .. Funny how musicans can read or hear things others dont .. If your interested a very good friend of mine BossCombat is also a member here and he's a very talented Bass guitarist you should take a look at his work ... he is a brillant young man .. Lovely to meet a fellow muso :) Love and light JayC x x LOL my net is playing up just noticed a whole sentance missing ... When you talked about reaching your audience I know what you meen .. There is no better feeling than when you connect to the audience and it becomes like a private interlude ... Your set ends the lights come up and the magic is hanging in the air ... thats how i feel anyhoo LOL

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Songs, versus poetry, gigs & Boss

Hi JayC, yes had to do a lot of driving the last few days, lots of thinking time, I did realise, I do still write songs more than poetry even here much of the time, thats why I have stanzas that alternate in form. Guess it's important to me that my songs don't always have the same form all the way through. It's a good revelation, though not sure it will make my poetry better. Yes I have read & commented Boss a few times, think that's where I chanced upon your work, he has a wonderful, unique poetry style too huh. Hope you get back into the singing gal, I don't like going too long without teaching OR performing to be honest (I sing my best as a rule when performing, & I get more joy from the interaction with my fellow musos, that's where we have the most fun.. was a great weekend for me, got to sing with a bunch of different contemps, all day Sunday (festival), sounds like I generally do a lot more acoustic work than you might though, lot more organic, less bright lights & hype much of the time, though I've done plenty of bigger gigs in my time. Happy writing. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Lucky

Gal you make me jealous ... the bright lights are far away these days Anni ... I was a soprano soloist for many years .. singing cantata's , opera , etc you get my meaning but these days after being sick on and off for the last few years I dont perform ... I am much the same as you i enjoy interacting with other muso's as well ... but i have to be honest i miss that rush ... the rush when your performing and well its just ... perfect ...One day i'd love to perform again , last year was the last time i performed and i have to say i miss it ... Boss is a very gifted young man puts me to shame , hes not only , gifted bassist , he is an incredible artist , and now hes here and writing some incredible poetry im so glad i showed him the site i know he will only go from strength to stength here( hes also one of my favourtie people on the face of the planet) very special young man the poems that ive read certainly have a lyrical quailty ... i think thats why i enjoy your work so much ... I dont know about the bright lights so much as i enjoy jamming with friends there is nothing better than having a couple of drinks and just kicking back jamming ... my partner plays the bass and Matty(boss) is his hero , with matt and another friends help he has really gotten so much better ... I really enjoyed this poem i look forward to your next offering Love and light JayC x

Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

hey Anni

I fuckin love this poem (excuse the explitives) but its true. The images this poem conjured inside me were quite profound. I especially enjoyed the references to music. The idea that an audience is reached and moved through the medium of song is what I have found in my life to be a beautifull thing, nothing better than to move people with music.. Anyway awesome readz Two thumbs up from me Bosscombat

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Keep up the music & your powerful writing

Hey Boss, thanks for that, that's high praise & I'm glad it got to you on a music level. JayC sings your praises bigtime, you must have impressed her, good bass player I believe. Yep, it's a really good feeling to move people with your music huh.. Bass is great, I always love my bass players, somehow they seem to be the ones with the best humour too. Better keep moving there were about 56 new emails in my inbox from a couple of days away, think lots of them might be comments on other people's poems, so hopefully I wont need to write that many responses. Keep up the music & your powerful writing. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Shonna James

17 years 2 months ago

Love, love, love it.

Say again - love, love, love it. You are so talented. Can only wish I could sing too! xxsejxx

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

I say... just sing anyway, you might surprise yourself!

Hi Shonna Thanks, glad you like it... Hey who needs to sing with dimples like that! Actually as anyone who knows me will tell you, there's no such thing as not being able to sing, if you want to, you just need to find the right teacher who knows that. It's all about listening... to yourself & where you are in relation to spaces, other notes, the notes before & after the current one you are singing, the rhythm/beats (even if they are not actually audible) etc, etc. It's a shame poeple who want to sing don't get access to this.. I work with it a lot... I say... just sing anyway, you might surprise yourself! Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."