Phoenix Ashes

You who art so lost and unforgiving
You hold onto love
like it was a dark secret
when it should be freely given

You bury love under mountains of dirt
like it was rancid treasure bones
when it should be phoenix ashes
scattered over ocean
into air
alleviating every why
permeating everywhere

You cage love disasterously
like it was a gaoled paradise bird
colours not to be seen
song never to be heard
but be assured
it will fly
it will soar

You closet love yet covet praise
you collect it, for shelving
you dam love up
with boulders of insignificance
which mount up
and subdue the magnificence

When it should be
a river freely flowing
meandering slowly
sometimes wildly eroding
the heartland.

— faerybeki, Apr 02, 2009

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Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

A beautiful piece! And I

A beautiful piece! And I love your title (whats with the title debates today??), it's a stunning image. And it works because you make other references to the bird: You cage love disasterously like it was a gaoled paradise bird colours not to be seen song never to be heard but be assured it will fly it will soar So it resonates through the whole poem. I love the first verse as well. Awesome write Beki!!!!! Peace and Love Katie

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Thankyou Katie for your read

Thankyou Katie for your read and your comment, I'm so happy and still a bit suprised that people seem to enjoy my 'work', but as I get so much pleasure form reading poems here, I suppose I shouldn't be! :) Thanks for the feedback on the title, much appreciated and glad you like it. Much love b x

paparazii

17 years 2 months ago

Phoenix ashes

It's a walla wonder, hey indeed you know the real divine of love, this one reminds me of the deceitful cunning craftness of man, who pretents love, yet in their hearts it's buried under mountains of dirt. Great piece Fairy peace n love Pap

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Hey Pap, you got this one

Hey Pap, you got this one just right! Thanks for commenting and glad you liked it! :) Will try and make time to read that old one of yours but probably not til after the weekend, hope that's ok? much love b xx Ps. Like your new pic, but v serious ;) you do smile sometimes don't you? I do hope so :) wil send you some in exchange for the yellow!! :) :) x

paparazii

17 years 2 months ago

Yo!

Liked it very much--oh cool, anytime u got the tym, this pic i was taken the school days, had some issues during the days--guess u know how Zimbabwe is at the moment, just hope things wld change very soon--cozi'm still worried about ma sister n don't knw wht shld i do to let her come. Anyway, life is us--we'll get there. The best pap

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

hey Pap, we know what we see

hey Pap, we know what we see on the news about the state of affairs in your country, but I can't even begin to imagine what life has been and still is like for you there. Is your sister not in mylife project with you? If I can do anything for you Pap, other than send my thoughts and lots of love to you and your sister, please let me know? I've started a poem in Shona for you, but am finding it quite hard as the English-Shona dictionary I found online only goes up to 'M'!! :) Got to write it with the words that are there, so might take me a while, please don't expect much :) 'life is us- we'll get there', great attitude Pap! lovin the poetry and the attitude, keep it up hon!! :) much love b x

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Fascinating way of putting it Beki

And the poem fascinates too as one wanders through and studies the attitudes of the "you" from all 'his' facets. Nicely vile and beautiful contrasts. Your poem hidden in its cage of words like a frightened bird and we want to let it out too. I prefer 'as if ' to 'like ... but that's me being old fashioned maybe? Hope you succeed if you want to? Good luck in love anyhow. Yours Ann of Norway

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Ann, thank you for

Hi Ann, thank you for commenting will ponder the 'as if' suggestion and see how it fits, don't think it's old fashioned at all by the way, was wondering if maybe there were too many 'like it was..' and your 'as if's might just mix it up a bit, so thanks again! Success? do I want to succeed? Oh Ann I want to succeed at life, at living, at loving, at being the best me I can be. Thank you for the luck and the love Ann of Norway, it is most appreciated and please accept the same from me to you! much love b x

orgami

17 years 2 months ago

I like this poem

my mind swirling with words trying to comment leaving some four hours sleep only ah well its cold and winterlike beautiful I love the poem Im happy siting in this room yes love and its many ways

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

I’m kind of pleased I got

I'm kind of pleased I got your mind swirling :) and I love that you're happy :) but I do hope you get some sleep! wishing you the sweetest of dreams Orgami much love b x