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I really like what you have so far... one... the way I read it... maybe something like "possibility" or maybe I missed something... but I thought it would fit nicely... good to see you here and posting... Richard

three times, very carefully, and i maintain that you are one of the best and most unfairly neglected poets on neopoet. your careful choice of words here makes it somewhat difficult to find an appropriate substitute for "one"--though if i were to make a flimsy, off the cuff suggestion it would be "single". this world rings a with a bit more definition, though again i'm not sure it needs to be changed at all. GB!

One of the things that's hardest to take away from us is our stories and, sadly, even they can be taken away. That's what I take from this. Now, re: one-you have a gardening theme, maybe: germ, seed, embryo.

I feel a contradiction in this piece. You are waiting to tell, yet you are feeding on memories you don't have? In any event to replace "one" perhaps:beginning? ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

I tend to agree. "I don't have" is a bit of a twist that I have trouble grasping. Maybe "didn't know I had" ??? hmm Best of luck, Mark I shall return :) Trust is a secret that never comes home.

My thoughts for what they're worth, perhaps the word could be ...caught. Craig

Alas, I have comme back to this gem,I would write each[;]or [,] and omit "one" just a suggestion.I never was an English major. ___________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

do band-aids make up better, or do we gain comfort to heal under? In ink, Dabbler

How about --- each [chunk] finding [] words pushing out small roots feeding on memories i don’t have, tolerating sunlight. Yours, Chuck PS: Or --- each [chunk] finding [its] words pushing out small roots feeding on memories i don’t have, tolerating sunlight.