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Beware Shadow Mountain

Shadow Mountain

On Shadow Mountain late at night
She dances in the pale moolight
Watch closely and you'll see her there
Moonlight glistening in silv'ry hair
See her gown billowing free
As she dances and laughs with glee

But beware when storm clouds appear
See the light'ning and smell the fear
Watch closely and you'll see her there
Scarlet rivulets, blood-soaked hair
Flowing gown, tattered and torn
Exposed and stumbling through the storm

On Shadow Mountain in the pale moonlight
Her smile lights up the darkest night
Listen, hear the laughter as it floats out
Hear it echo as she dances about
Falling from lips so moist and sweet
She chases shadows, graceful and fleet

Don't go there on stormy nights
You'll feel her terror, taste her fright
If you're unlucky you'll see the fall
From the cliff that stands so tall
You'll hear her screams through the icy blow
And see her body on the rocks below

"Beware Shadow Mountain when storm winds blow"
The old folks say and I guess they know
There's a story that no-one will tell
Some say the mountain is under a spell
But there's a mystery that still remains
"Beware Shadow Mountain when comes the rains"

— Rett, Mar 31, 2009

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Region, Country: Southern Texas, USA

Favorite Poets: Dickenson, Longfellow

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poewriter58

17 years 2 months ago

Rett

This is outstanding and I am still waiting for a bad write from you so I have something to comment on lol Chrys
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

*LOL* Thanks Chrys

Oh, I have plenty of bad ones. Ones I wouldn't even show my wife and she doesn't like poetry. *LOL* Very glad you liked it my friend. I truly appreciate it. Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Janice

It is odd what the mind conjures up isn't it? Glad you liked it. Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Morgana Tragic Proprietress

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Beautifully written, a

Beautifully written, a masterpiece, as always Rett! Love the imagery, it's just gorgeous wording!!! It tells a very haunting story on top of that...amazing amazing. Peace and Love Katie
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

My oh my, let me stick a pin in my head

to deflate my ego a bit. Wow! Thank you my friend. Very happy that you enjoyed it. Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Double D

I will most assuredly see what I can do in those places. I just don't want to overuse certain words or get too wordy with the poem. Very glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and suggest ways I can improve it. That is what it is all about at this site! *S* I have implemented most of the changes you suggested as they worked out really well. Thank you. Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Beware Shadow Mountain

Ohhhhhhhh Loved it Rett!! Nicely written, you had me on the edge of my computer chair with the hair on the back of my neck standing up yikes!! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Many Many Thanks Janice

So very glad you liked this one. I wrote it a long time back and finally got up the nerve to post it. I wasn't sure how it would go, but several seemed to like it. I guess I did okay. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905