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Poetic soul, 31, seeks union
communion, companion
for walks in the park
whispers in the dark
fingers that linger and long
to trace the lines
that time has etched
to delve into places
long left untouched
to tease her to screaming
share in her dreaming
holding her hand, in this land
on this journey.

Yummy mummy wishes for kisses
the kind that make a soul soar
for eyes to see the heart of her
for arms to embrace the parts of her
that still need healing
to start her laughing
leaving her reeling
bowled over by love.

Husband sought, by wife
for friendship, for life
for wondering with
for growth in the light
for fathering tomorrrows
bridges over sorrows
loving deliverance
deliberate lovingness
for this nothingness to be full
of articulated hope.
Beauty compounded with bravery
leading her to this place
of readiness
a willingness to enter
and
be
entered.

 

— faerybeki, Mar 31, 2009

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Faerybeki...

I love the poem... the theme... want ad... very good! I did notice a couple of things, maybe... in the last stanza... for fathering more tomorrows a bridge over sorrow I felt the "more could be omitted to make it tighter and then... "and bridges over sorrows" ... I felt they should be plural... because even if you were to hook-up with Mr. Oh-So-Right through this very alluring add... you would go through more than one sorrow... just a suggestion... loved it! Richard
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Richard, have great

Thanks Richard, have great respect for your opinion! Will have a little edit with your thoughts in mind! Definitely agree on pluralising bridge/sorrow, so get what you mean! Glad you like the theme, started out a short, fun, rhyming thing but I ended up getting carried away (so like me!), as for actually hooking up with anyone as a result of this, God! just between you and me Moonman, I'm not quite as ready as the poem may lead you to believe! :) much love b xx
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Nathaniel Radcliffe

17 years 2 months ago

An enjoyable piece.

I could see this working well in a poetry slam environment, with its short lines and tightly packed rhymes (do you see what I did there?). It is fast and fun, yet carries a small cargo of emotion. It reminds me of some of my poems in fact, but it carries with them the attendant weaknesses. While you manage to include some imagery, and evoke some emotion, this jaunty form is unsuited to deep feelings. As long as you did not intend to evoke them, it works very well.
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Nathaniel for reading

Thanks Nathaniel for reading and commenting, i see you are new to Neopoet, so will start by extending you a very warm welcome :) and will try and read your poem tonight, if it doesn't get too late! I totally see what you did there ;) such slick rhymes! You are right I wasn't trying to evoke deep emotion, just started off, as I said to Moonman above, as a silly little rhyme but as ever, i got carried away! I was just having a play really! but so glad you enjoyed it! much love b x Ps never been in a poetry slam environment, can you take your notebook? :) not sure i could do it fast off the top of my head!
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Craig Norris

17 years 2 months ago

nice one Bek

I think this rolls along very nicely, would be careful where you post it, you might be swamped by an avalanche of applicants. Craig
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

LOL! :) Thanks Craig glad

LOL! :) Thanks Craig glad you liked it! As for an avalanche of applicants (i do love your language choices you know! have you posted something new? will go check in a min!) not too sure..just between you and me ;), I'm not as ready as the poem would have people think!! much love b xx
Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 2 months ago

Ha! Since I’m exactly

Ha! Since I'm exactly twice as old as you are, I should have three times the fun! "a willingness to enter and be entered" Evokes all kinds of images...er memories...er stuff. Hugz, Anna p.s. love your pic... your doggie is a Great Pyrenees? "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Anna, so sorry I seem to

Hi Anna, so sorry I seem to have missed your comment, but will thank you for it now :) Am happy this poem evoked some er stuff for you ;) The doggie is not mine, he belongs to some friends, he's a sameoyd (probably not spelt right!). By the looks of your own pic, you are having 3 times the fun Anna! a beautiful scene. Much love b x
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Ink Dragon

17 years 2 months ago

Definitely finished, Beki!

And so skillfully done. Sorry for catching up with this one so late. A very evocative (and just explicit enough ;) write! Yours, ~Nina
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Nina, please don’t

Hi Nina, please don't apololgise for 'catching this one late', that you find time to read so many and always leave some ink is wondrous to me ;) Your opinion means a lot to me Nina, as I so admire your own poetry. (have started expanding my lonely acrostic, maybe ready to post soon! :) ) much love b xx