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Under the Radar

I did come into this world
a kickin' and a cryin';
just as I'm quite certain that we all did;

with everyone else a smilin';
but, I'm really not sure as to,"why"...
for I can't remember that far back.

But, I truly believe it was a private aversion
to being mugged and robbed of comfort.
Change is definitely traumatic,

just as everyone well knows;
however, should I ever have to suffer another
one of them traumatic "aversion attacks",

and should I begin cryin' like an infant,
like the nominee for the "Regional Pity Party of Me"...
well, I think I'd be almost positive that regular folks

would be inclined to do a bit more, than smile;
at least until they collected themselves...
maybe even until it were time to count the ballots.

After that, I might venture to say, I was in peril
and possibly, in danger of not being taken seriously, ever again !
But I can assure you of one thing, for certain.

I will find great solace in the solid fact,
that everyone else will be crying at my "wake",
as I would most assuredly be slumbering,

stealthfully, with great dignity.
Because, I will then be flying,
and gently gliding by.....under the radar. 
— docmaverick, Mar 30, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

yenti

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

Doc

Liked this piece it was a lot different than the norm run of things, and kept my attention,till the end, Yours Ian.T
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 2 months ago

Ian....

...you got me, I'm a bit out of the "norm", today. Big Smiles, Thanks, doc.
weirdelf

weirdelf

17 years 2 months ago

out of the norm is good, a splendid write.

the colloqial mixed with formal language, the very strange structure of hanging verse endings, the wry humour combined with a cheerful profundity all combine to remind me of why I love your (best) poetry and Neopoet. It's a real risk-taking poem and a few minor edits could help it gurgle more merrily, but it works. cheers, Jess Forever unwrapping the eternal present.
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 2 months ago

Thanx, elf....

...I appreciate your kind reply. Very, very generous...to say the "least". I especially must thank you for reminding me of where I need to grow, how much I've grown to need your input, and how whilste on this planet...I'd much rather NOT fly, under the radar, because "risks are a much better learning-tool". Like it, or not...Jess; you are STILL my "Mentor". Thanx, again. docmaverick. 1-4-3 Neo-Poet.