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Achilles' Heel

She turns away to cry,
to me it seems..... majestic
a broadcast of pure expression
spread on canvas, eclectic
she's infatuating, i can't resist
the sudden movement of her shoulders
the subtle briskness of her wrists.

She laughs that laugh,
to me it seems..... infectious
a sound that resonates in my mind
hide my eagerness. anxious
I enjoy the things she implies
her dry sence of humour
and the swift boldness of her eyes

That texture,
always echoes a recollection
and a sharp tingle up my spine,
fine to touch,
a slight inflection.
I can find the right smile
That's basically all I have to give
That, a chestful of devotion
Emotion and a plethora of moments
That I wish to relive.

She slowly walks past,
to me it seems..... inticing
admire from a distance, yet not too far
my curiosity is slowly rising
I just cant find the words
observe her audacious nerve,
or the bends of her hypnotic curves.

The nights are still lonely though
to me it seems..... cold
if only i had something to offer
or could shower her in gold
my heart full of love, but pockets full of lint
I'd lean in close and softly hint:

"you fuel the fire in my belly,
you bury the demons,
and everything i have for you deepens"

I'll give up music.
I'll give up writing.
I'll give up smoking.
I'll give up drinking,
I'll give up swearing, spending and thinking,
Reading, sleeping in and not eating.
but, I want something in return
I want a moment, by your side
I want to earn it without concern.
I want to burn down the great divide
and then rise my head in pride

Yet i sigh that dreaded sigh
to me it seems..... pointless
she appears too content without me
and i find it hard to be an optimist
She has no idea of what i feel
i'll keep my cards close to my chest
because she's my achilles' heel.





— Bosscombat, Mar 29, 2009

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Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Love

Dear Matty , Been trying to think what to say about this poem .... I love it thats not in question and its beautifully writen .... Though im no critic i am sure it needs a little work punctuation etc but ill leave that to the experts .... They will guide you .... Do i know this girl or is this someone from your newcastle life .... lol i sound like your mother But i found this tremendously hard to read as we are friends by the end I was crying for love lost and love unnoticed Matt you are a awesome bass player a gifted artist and to throw something else into the mix your a mad poet ... You surprise me with your wit and sudden attacks of madness and you always make me smile ... Your one of those gifted people wandering round with no true sense of there worth .. Huni your happy ending hasn't found you yet your young and talented dont let life get to you ... One last thing if they are your true feelings there is nothing "sappy" or "lame" about this ... Its what poetry is all about ... <3 Luvluv Jayne-Chloe
Seren

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17 years 2 months ago

pmsl

You blush ?????? I gotta see that :P hahahahaha luvluv Jayne-Chloe
Seren

Seren

17 years ago

Matty ...

Jesus when you said rewrite I didnt know you meant you made it into a masterpiece .. great rewrite .. You my friend are turning into a great story teller .. can't tell yet who you remind me off .. I'm sure to let you know when I do :) much love Jayne xx