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Whisper again what you think I should say

I wanted to share something with you
  show you what things that I like to do…

I guess I just expected you to care
  but instead I got the long blank stare

I do wish I had your tint of rosy glasses
  but your shade of truth, just barely passes

 And my hindsight might not be 20/20
  but I can still remember more than plenty

I try to give you credit, where it was due
  I wish I could get the same in return from you
 

So tell me again how I pushed you away
  whisper again what you think I should say

Wonder some more why I don’t stop by
  give me the look that you don‘t think I try
 

Knock, knock, is there anyone home
  are you with me, or am I sitting alone

I could shout at you what I really think
  you could definitely drive a person to drink

And then accuse me of needing a shrink
  when you are the one who’s missing a link

 If you could offer as much as you expected
  you might find you were more respected

Again you presumed that I would think like you
  confident your pulpit has the more righteous view
 

So tell me again how I pushed you away
  whisper again what you think I should say

Wonder some more why I don’t stop by
  give me the look that you don‘t think I try
 

Show me that you only care if you like it
  go ahead, cut off your own nose just to spite it

Keep sharing with me your gossip and mind
  while not returning me the same deed in kind

Let’s see if your little selfish plan will work
 or will it prove to every one you're just a big jerk

I wonder when you’ll start to figure it all out
  after blaming me some more, I have little doubt

So keep on wondering why we can’t be friends
  see if it will change why we can’t make amends





Julie

D.D.

3/28/09

 
This could apply to a few people I know.....and I am sure many I don't.

— DawningDaytripper, Mar 28, 2009

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Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

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themoonman

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

D.D.

You just tell me who this is and I'll... I'll bat em in the eye I will... Anger a poet and prepare for the words... I do hope whoever this is for gets the chance to read it...and know it is for them....good write Julie... Richard
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Julie...

you are one of those shiny rocks to be treasured... all right, I won't hit your Mom... lol... and glad that you won't either... because now I really like her. I couldn't afford a computer either... my wife is mad at me for doing it, mainly because she liked me not being on it... and it all but took out my bank account... but she also knows how much I love coming here... and so it is accepted... she is one great gal. Richard
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Ink Dragon

17 years 2 months ago

Julie!

What a rant! Good flow (driven by the anger?) and it rhymes! (I always envy those who rhyme, as it´s not really one of my fortes...) Liked the reoccuring stanza, too, it´s like a chorus and makes the whole piece sound like a song. Yours, ~Nina P.S. your (l.34)-> you´re?
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Oh my Marvelous Rant

You tell 'em Julie! Awesome! I absolutely adore this line as it is so often true! Knock, knock, is there anyone home, are you with me, or am sitting alone. Now the one little nitpick *G* or will it prove to every one your(you're) just a big jerk. That's it! Top notch Double D. Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Congrat again on Spotlight

He he he, seems to be getting regular for you. *G* Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Whisper again what you think I should say. . .

Julie, Loved each poetic line~ and justice for all, loved it! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
themoonman

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Double D...

this is so deserving of the spotlight... loved it again! Richard
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prayersbyPatty

17 years 2 months ago

I liked your poem

Sad that it applies to a relative, I do not care for people who sit on a high horse and look down on others, who appointed them judge and jury. I know the kind of person of whom you speak. People who belittle you and say you need counseling, to bad for them. People who say it's my way or the highway are going to be alone on their pulpit. It is not our job to judge others, I have had to cut people like this out of my life, or was it them who cut me out of theirs? Either way, so sad. I like the title and the way you repeated it throughout the poem. Patty
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orgami

17 years 2 months ago

Mutter

I thought the poem was about me until you mentioned your mother then I re thought about it and yes I was taught to fight in verbal quick words No fighting we werent allowed that but words and they cut deeper then any fist sometimes I can only say for myself that yes yes it is about me I have become her because I fear her still Hear her still in the day and night Love her and want for her though shes been dead for years now let slip my human ness and profess the edge of ancientess to test one day yet Beautiful Poem !!!