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SAKTHEEE2007
Mar 28, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

He is No Where.

                  He is No Where.

               Hear my cry and give me peace
               I m in the dark and dirty hell
               Though my hands are showering flowers
                                           On His feet
               I m  weeping out of pains from out

               Every one comes to pinch in my heart
               to enjoy them selves in my pains and cry 
               Though they are in my shadow
               They are digging a pit behind me to push
             
               I m praying all along the day
               Result is zero
               My doubt is there whether He is?
               I f He is, H e has to come
               Till this second  He has n’t come
               I am sure, So He is nowhere
— SAKTHEEE2007, Mar 28, 2009

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Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

no where

sometimes i try too hard to see things in a way that i understand. if i just let myself feel, like i did with this poem, i can see that you are a man who is tortured by his own demons. fear not, for there is indeed a 'god'. you just have to find him on your own. you will make your way, for you have strength. i see it in your writings, that you are coming to the notion that you have to go looking for 'god', he won't come when you call him, he is an elusive being. no one knows the mind of 'god'. you have to believe in him, and know him when you find him. keep on keeping on. gee.
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Arrow

17 years 2 months ago

I like this poem.

It suffers some in translation. I created my own version, which I would share if you like but won't impose on you here. I found the last 3 lines particularly powerful. However, the logic is shaky, at best. If God does not come, that doesn't mean He is nowhere. Maybe He is somewhere else (which may be a more painful conclusion) rather than non-existant. I'm not suggesting an answer-just pointing out a logic problem. I found the whole poem quite intense. The speaker is quite alone.