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Conect11
Mar 27, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Two Days Gone

Two Days Gone Woke up late Friday morning,two days gone.Left the bed twice since Wednesdayin a complete haze. I've been getting my ass handed to mefor almost a week,now I just want to stay sunkeninto the warm sheets in my room,the blankets. Most hours I'm incoherent,but occasionally I wonderif I'll ever feel straight again. How ill,how ill a man must getto see the bottom.In an effort to obliteratethe next two daysI tranquilize myself. In three years,should there be another three years where, oh where will I be? Getting up todayis the hardest thing,I stumble and scuttle my wayto the shower. Maybe tomorrowI'll actually be awake.
— Conect11, Mar 27, 2009

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infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 2 months ago

Aww Mark...

Being sick sucks. Hope you feel better soon. this was a good bad poem in a good way (did that make sense?) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"The truth is, it doesn't matter what you do. 'Til you gaze in that mirror with an eye that's true. And admit that what scares you is the me in you..." - Steve Earle
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Bummer Mark

Being sick is not fun! A couple of months ago I had a bout of vertigo. I had heard about it, but never experienced it and it is scary as heck. I couldn't even crawl w/o falling on my face and everything was constantly whirling. I hope you are feeling lots better now and I feel for you. Now to business What did you think of my title? (The title was spot on. Said it all) How was my language use? (Your language was very good, succinct) What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?( the pattern was fine, worked well.) How does this theme appeal to you? (too close to home! *LOL*) How was the beginning/ending of the poem? (beginning and ending were just fine) Is the internal logic consistent?(it was totally consistent) Would like to say I enjoyed it, but sickness is never enjoyable, the poem was very good though! Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905