Uh uh temper temper!

Yeah! I got scars to heal
And yeah! I need something to believe in
But not bad habits and bad karma
A frayed temper or unwanted drama
Losing sleep, more, losing self
Im not sure what it means
But I can't slide it back on the shelf

Yeahh..I have scars to heal
Uhuh!...you've heard it all before? Yeah ok(!)
"Us muckity mucks pleading to the upity ups"
Well fuck! I've had my hand up
But drowned in the crowd.
Too broken, not healthy, not proud
Not worthy
At least not to sport that crown.

Fuck yeah I have scars to heal
To feel
Furious and sowing my own seeds of discontent
"You reap what you sow"
I say with malice and shallow intent
But listen, hear my screamin', pleadin'
For something to rid me of these demons
And still there's nothing left to feel

Oh yeh..........I have scars left to heal
and that's the whole thing

— Bosscombat, Mar 27, 2009

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Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Powerful

Matty is this about you ? .... You are a deep deep well of emotions my friend and this just shows me how much you keep bottled up... Your a beautiful person ... Any scars you may have (not that ive noticed any) must be inside...Which in turn makes me incredibly sad that you felt like this ... If ever you feel like this again you better ring me bucko or its on ... No one should feel the despair I can feel when i read your poem love you Jayne-Chloe xoxoxoxo

Race_9togo

17 years 2 months ago

Hey Boss

This is good. I enjoyed the anger of it, that "what don't you understand" defiance. And the ending seems strangely positive to me, as if the whole thing is a process towards something better, in spite of all the obstacles. I like the rhythm of this piece very much. The repetition, the rhyming and cadence all serve to intensify the meaning, and the result is very very good. If I have a criticism, it is that you could tighten up the cadence a little, so that the poem flows better. But this isn't really a bad thing, since we humans are a chaotic bunch, and your piece captures that too. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race

Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

G’day jim Thanks for the

G'day jim Thanks for the comment mate Next time im near a computer ill read your work. I can't really see things properly on my mobile phone. Thanks again! Bosscombat

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

BossCombat

You stop throwing a little paddy there, the Irish are fed up with being mistreated. Enjoyed your little tantrum though, and it held me there.,but I managed to get out and smile, Yours Ian.T

Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

hey Ian

Thanks for the feedback mate! Not sure what you meant by mistreating the irish, im quite proud of my irish blood haha when I get my pc back I will also read your work! Thanks for reading my tantrum :) Bosscombat

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

Boss

A Paddy is a slang word, both for an Irish person, and for losing your usual calm self and stamping your feet, throwing one meaning going into a temper, I used it for being unkind to the Irish,I was just playing with words "Begorra" Yours Ian.T

Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

ohhh

Thanks for clearing that one up, I've never heard "paddy" when refering to a tantrum haha Bosscombat

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Boss...

Welcome to Neopoet... I know it's a bit late but I've been out of commission for awhile(computer crashed), so this is the first I've read of your work. I agree with Jim on this write... although the flow seems a bit choppy it adds to the flavor of the poem, it doesn't always work like that, but in this write it works very well... The only suggestion I could possibly make is in the spelling of sewing... sowing seeds... sewing cloth... minor but it does change the meaning of the word. Welcome again... Richard

Bosscombat

17 years 2 months ago

hey Richard

Hey mate! Thanks for the welcome and also your feedback! I knew my spelling would be my downfall haha. Im also computerless im using my mobile phone. So when I get my pc back I will read your work! Thanks again! BossCombat