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Circle of Life

When does the child first care for the parent?
Thing as imperceptible as first light,
Just there like a sad poem, inherent—
The beginning of day or end of night.
At what distinct point does a circle end
And a new one begin?  Would that new course      
Be traveled left or right around the bend?
Picked up again—with or with out remorse?
At some moment summer green starts to fade,
Thing as imperceptible as first light.
Wind dyed leaves cover grass, no longer jade;
Righteous snow falls once more to hide in white.
The cycle begins all over again—
But where did it begin? Where does it end?

— deelilah, Mar 23, 2009

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Region, Country: Northwest USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.E. Cummings, Robert W. Service, Emily Dickenson

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gonzodave

17 years 2 months ago

~Dee

I like the title and questioning theme that you have shared. I know and respect that poetry is extremely personal to some authors. I do not kick the servant of poetry - emotion - when he comes through the door. I court his favor and try to design a poem to suit the need. I do not have a resume list that reads from elbow to wrist. I only speak of what I've learned and applied to myself as a response to reading thousands of amateur poems in the last eight months. An interesting expression, for me, is unique. Thus cliche in phrasing is avoided by intent. Cliche can be well used as a poetic device by intent - certainly. Passion and craft is always the challenging mix.
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 2 months ago

Hello Gonzo or Dave or Gonzodave

What do you like to be called? Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem. I am curious about this: 'An interesting expression, for me, is unique. Thus cliche in phrasing is avoided by intent. Cliche can be well used as a poetic device by intent - certainly. Passion and craft is always the challenging mix.' Did you share this because I used cliche, which I admit I can't figure out which line is, or because I should, or just as a matter of interest? If I in fact did use cliche, could you tell me what line/s it is? Again, thanks. Yours, Dee