Janice Pearce

Mar 22, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Symphony in Vile

Words of vile
stung her cheek
hurled without
regard.

For a little girl,
the mental abuse
can leave the
worst of scars.
She wrote her
feelings on
scraps of paper;
they became
her voice.
Tear stained,
they now
lie beneath
her breast.
As the
nightingales
sang faintly
outside
her window
ledge,
she heard their
random notes
as she fell
asleep crying
in her bed.
Someday she
will share
a poem
for all
the world
to read,
just as those
random notes
of singing birds
had become a
symphony.

— Janice Pearce, Mar 22, 2009

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Country/Region: USA

Critiques

prayersbyPatty

17 years 2 months ago

Jan

I love this one... Awesome Patty

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Symphony in Vile

Thank you Patty, Long time since I have seen or heard from you. I appreciate you stopping by! Take care~Thanks for your kind words! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Oh my Janice

This is so great. achingly heartbreaking, yet beautiful. Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Symphony in Vile

Appreciate your thouughts Rett, thank you~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

barbsdad2003

17 years 2 months ago

I suggest here ...

Perhaps a capitalized "for" would lend greater consistency: for a little girl, the mental abuse can leave the worst of scars. as in For a little girl, --- Perhaps a semicolon insertion's in order: She wrote her feelings on scraps of paper they became her voice. as in She wrote her feelings on scraps of paper; they became her voice. --- A change might be in order to correct a verb: Tear stained, they now lay beneath her breast. as in lie beneath --- Perhaps a spelling fix'd mend a mar. nightengales as in nightingales Yours, Nitpicker Chuck PS: I do like the short lines. And have taken to writing most of them that way myself in more recent time.

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Symphony in Vile

Nitpicker Chuck, Glad you had the time to correct my errors Chuck. I truly appreciate it. Is all well now? One of these days I will submit a poem that will need no editing and surprise you~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

barbsdad2003

17 years 2 months ago

Wow!

Am I impressed how those fixin's brightened up this piece. Brings it magically to life. I'm also impressed by the writing itself. The changes helped me to see it for what it is ... i.e., one very good write. Impressive! Thanx, Chuck

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Kind Sir

So glad to have a friend such as yourself on the site to be such a help. Always bailing me out. Much appreciated!! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

nokros

17 years 2 months ago

Symphony in Vile

this falls so easy on the ear - so impressively innocent, yet speaks so loud. good write

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Symphony in Vile

Nokros, Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, much appreciated~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Wafi

17 years 2 months ago

Symphony In Vile.

I love your style of saying so much in so less words. Great write! Sincerely, Wafi

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Symphony in Vile

Wafi, I truly appreciate your honest opinion about my style. Thank you so much, always like the feedback~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

themoonman

17 years 2 months ago

Janice...

I loved the poem and the title drew me in for the read, well of course it had your name on it which promises a grand read anyway... isn't Chuck great, I love the way he sees into a poem and helps to direct the readers take... very important in the art of poetry... Richard

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

Richard

Chuck can put the ball exactly where it needs to go for the touchdown. I am still learning from him. Thank goodness we have him here to help us rookies on the site! Glad you liked the poem. I had been talking to a few people that day about children who had been verbally abused and this is what became of it~ ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

deelilah

17 years 1 month ago

Hello Janice

It's been a while since we've talked. Been so busy, but missed this so much. The poem is very sweet, poignant, relevant, and so much more. 'As the nightingales sang faintly outside her window ledge, she heard their random notes as she fell asleep crying in her bed.' I love these lines. Yours, Dee

Janice Pearce

17 years 1 month ago

Symphony in Vile

Dee, Thank you for reading, yes it has been a whileand thanks for your comments always appreciate your feedback! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Craig Norris

17 years ago

symphony in vile

tragic how these threads of abuse and neglect weave themselves. Sunlight is a counterpoint. Cheers Craig

Janice Pearce

17 years ago

Symphony

Craig, Thank you for reading and your thoughts, always appreciated~ ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous