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Time Bubble

Time is an open-ended bubble.
Will it pop?  I think not
Until it empties each grain
Onto the infinite beach, or
The soul understands trouble.

Time is a bubble because it’s round.
Will it pop?  I think not
Though its skin is translucent,
Pure and so thin as to not be
Seen quietly, nor make sound.

Outside the bubble, I do exist.
Will it pop?  I think not
Before we come full circle,
Back to a bright new beginning
Hard to see through the mist.

The bubble floats up into the air.
Will it pop?  I think not
While brushing the baby’s cheek,
Who reaches upward but misses;
True dreams time will not share.

Oh, the bubble changes its thin form.
Will it pop?  I think maybe
It will tilt and fall toward
The sky below, to empty the
Clouds from its starry room.

The bubble’s skin becomes thickly wet.
Will it pop?  I think maybe
It hangs in eagerness
To spill out the sands, and rise
Up newborn not quite yet.

The moon is round, absolutely true.
Will it shine?  I think so
To light the universe
In time to meet the bright sun,
Dawning before it’s due.

The stars are round, but no, that’s not true.
Will they shine?  Certainly so
To light eternity
Their points will pop the bubble
Dawning because it’s due.
— deelilah, Mar 20, 2009

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Region, Country: Northwest USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.E. Cummings, Robert W. Service, Emily Dickenson

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Arrow

17 years 2 months ago

I struggle a little with

what I feel is a mixed metaphor, i.e., time as a bubble and time as filled with sand (like an hourglass, I guess?). I also struggle with some logical inconsistencies, e.g., time as open-ended and time as a circle. (Maybe this is some zen paradox? I'm not zen-like.) That said, there are some outstanding images and lines: *line 1: reminds me of children running in a field with one of those bubble makers that creates a tunnel-like bubble *line 5 *stanzas 3 and 4, esp. stanza 4: I love the image of the child trying to catch a bubble and burst the confines of time while a wiser adult stands and watches. I could have done without the moon and star stanzas. Finally, I wonder about rearranging the stanzas to end w/stanza 4, where the imagery of people's relationship to time is so vivid. Interesting poem.
deelilah

deelilah

17 years 2 months ago

Good Morning Arrow

I agree with everything you said. Like I said, it was the weirdest thing I ever wrote and I'm not sure why I wrote it. I had just begun toying with the idea of writing poetry. I think it is a zen paradox, although I'm not sure what that is. I do find life is usually paradoxical. I think I will revisit the poem and write a new one that makes some sense. I appreciate your taking the time to read it, though, and I will be sure to incorporate your insights. Thanks, Deelilah