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Every journey delivers me here

Dark eyes shine, night skies are beautifulEverything looks shallow next to thoseI don’t know how you could ever look at other eyesSeeking out the sadness in the darkness as they close Tentative and gentle, science is respiteImages of history, like lanterns in the darkI saw you smile, such beautiful laughterLit up the clearing like a fast forest spark All of that distance and time was enabledPurely to take me to thatEvery journey, so subtle, delivered meTo the soft forest of gums where we sat Give me that moment’s fleeting sightI’ll spend my evenings playing it backKnow I can’t reach you in the nightWatch you patiently, try to keep track OneStepSilently SilencesSwallowMy aim OneLeapFly to me Outsidethe realmssome others might claim Touch me, and touch me, and touch me againYour heart to my heart – without any pain. 
— Cloudthings, Mar 20, 2009

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Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

In the calm of a Winter's

In the calm of a Winter's morning, bland and white this little pale-feeling memory, makes the sky bright and lights up the quiet feelings again like the smell of the Autumn leaves in mornings rain. With this I identify, singing along, you have taken me with you, your beautiful song. And memories linger to soothe you just now when you're painfully weak and your head takes a bow but there in your heart is the strength that you gained so it won't be so long till your love is reclaimed the fires died down in the forests nearby but the phoenix will rise again, sing your song high all the world will be bright again, look at the sky! Your friend Ann writes straight down here as I eat my breakfast and look out of the window at the day. With love.
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thank you dearest Ann

My loveliest Ann, I am so deeply spoilt with the likes of you who write to my creations, weaving wondrous conversation in poetry & prose.. what complete delight, & more dear, sweetness & concern for my own heart, lovely thing... Lucky me, & I am so grateful, truly. But here is a thing for you to know lovely one... the sadness here is not so much for me, but for another. The first verse relates to the loss of another, I was sent some photographs of a woman with the darkest saddest eyes, & perfect features, a Mayan goddess, with rose red lips & 2 children more perfect skinned & featured than I may ever have seen. Those children lost their mother, that beautiful woman, it's hard to believe, & yet in the photograph, it almost looks as though she expects it (she could not have)... I can't imagine her partner ever looking at another woman after that exquisite face & those eyes... (& yes, in my history I have known such a feeling for my own loss, but long ago). My heart has been daily reknitting thank you dear Ann, & given I never really lost anything but a dream that never came to fruition, I guess one would expect it should be a fast recovery... Who knows, I think I am clean of the worst of it now anyway. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Hey Chuck of the winter

Hey Chuck of the winter reverie, thank you. Ever so succinct & powerful in your response. Hope spring is being beautiful to you. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

You write the world so supurbly my friend.

Hey Chuck, I slipped past this comment & felt compelled to tell you I am very much looking forward to hearing how the spring will look here shaped by your lovely precise words & sentiments... I hope you write of it soon... We are heading into Autumn now (Fall for you perhaps?), it occured to me that I drink your poems like refreshing beverages bringning respite from the extreme opposites in weather condtions we expereince on our global polar... You write the world so supurbly my friend. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

journeys

your words are stronger than you know, they strike my heart with so strong blow. you can write your words,and strike a chord, sometimes almost, i can't afford. i wouldn't want to trade, the words that you have made your tongue is gold or silver, you really make me quiver. glad your heart is mending, wouldn't want such a beautiful thing to be broken forever. gee. keep on keeping on.
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

I'm pleased you take your pleasure Gee, in whimsys of my heart

Well, if my tongue is gold & silver I will rain it down on you & you will be a rich man for these sentiments you grew & you need never trade away the pleasures of the word each element of gentle play & warmth there for your wife, (the third) I'm pleased you take your pleasure Gee in whimsys of my heart how wonderful to give it out in these lines I feel I must impart & you in all your "funnery" & generous response bring pleasure back reflected in this happy "Once upon's" I chuckle as we interact, it's always joy & good to play with word & rhyme & care we do because we could! Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thank you

Oh, I wonder why (curious thing I am)... & I feel glad you like it, it is a strange circumstance this, ironic & unique... in a way there is no way to aproach it with words except in poetry Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Anni, for me not the best

Hi Anni, for me not the best i have read from you but so beautiful none the less. I love the change in rhythm towards the end, you are a master at it!! I also find i learn so much from reading you and the comments your work draws from others, i feel blessed to have found you. much love b xx P.S Curiouser and curiouser said Alice!! ;) I do so love meeting you in Wonderland Anni x
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thank gorgeous Beki. Yes, I get a lot from the comments as well

Dam, hate it when I write a response then forget to send post. Sorry did respond to this before & must have done that (not enought sleep!) Thanks gorgeous Beki. Yes, I get a lot from the comments as well, so much to learn always. I often tell my students it's important to learn to put things out there even if you feel you might not have it "right", if you fear getting it "wrong" & thus don't try it, you limit your progress hugely. I feel all of us here do this courageous thing, expose out vulnerable babies & face the music that comes back, thus we are the lucky ones who gain insight & grow from it. Curiouser indeed... You do look a bit like the Cheshire cat in this picture! xx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

wondering

there was a once upon a time for me too. your words brought me back to a time in my youth, when being young and stupid, i didn't know what i had. it was a warm summer day with a gentle breeze in a piney woods. i was with someone who was dear. we parted company, but she held the torch for many years without my knowing. i only found out after i went to her funeral. from one of her children. you brought that day back so clearly that i was lost for about a half-hour 'till i finally came back. i guess only one who has truly had an experience such as this, may know what it is to pine. keep on keeping on. gee.
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Hi Gee, that's a sad tale

Hi Gee, that's a sad tale. Such a shame when the lessons came too late to make the difference at the time, I know that one REALLY well... In fact have been discussing that very thing with the person this poem is written around. He has no regrets, had an exceptional marriage for 20 years, sudden loss is so painful (any loss), but worse if there are regrets... I was so young when my partner died & I did have regrets, wished so much I had said all the good things I felt that I never would have another chance to say or do with him... I learned that lesson SO hard. I guess you can see I DO that thing everywhere in my life now as a result, if I have a positive thing to say I am driven to say it, I care not if it makes me sound like a suck (Australianism "sucking up to someone", I believe has bad connotations in other countries, understandably!), it isn't about trying to ingratiate myself, it is truly about wanting to contribute what I am actually feeling instead of just keeping it inside (it was so painful to know I would never have a chance to speak those things to the man I loved so much, let him know how much I apreciated him or believed in him, from the littlest things to the major ones), you never know when it'll make a difference, & if it doesn't, no harm done... I know there are times it makes a difference, I never give positive feedback if it isn't genuine, would be a lie in that case, so I know people feel it is credible. Anyway, glad the writing touched your heart, it's never a bad thing to give someone a few moments (or 1/2 hour) of reverence in your mind... for me makes me more grateful for what I have & I'm more effective in giving it out more then. Good on you Gee. Thanks for your words. See ya in the blue & fluffified spaces! xx Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
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orgami

17 years 2 months ago

Spotlight Conrat!!

Wow watched your poems from the long verses descriptive and beautiful to this new poem sculpted balanced light with new feeling I love it when my brain thinks shorter verses and few striking words makes my brain think like word association or something amazing new poem I love the new feel the new look (just in between vacuming in from part time work sunny beautiful here now) must return to work but what a very pleasant suprise to find you here in Spotlight and read this great sad tribute poem
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks for the support & sorry I bumped your extraordinary write

Hiya O, thank you for the support & sorry for bumping your (always) extraordinary write. You KNOW I hugely admire your work & am ALWAYS so honoured when you interact with my own. It is so inspiring, love your humble ways & your familiar (not at ALL in a "boring" way, familiar as in, your words resonate so deeply in me) expressions so deftly painted in letters on my screen. You have no idea how much I look forward to your input & your works, along with all these other gorgeous writers here... ah we are spoilt I adore it so much. Have a great time with the inlaws visit, & good on you for vaccuuming etc. been avoiding that here for more than a week or 2!!! Ooops confessions of a Neopoet junky! Take care of you & Lori & the cats & the others that come & go... & write more (please... sorry if that's demanding) Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

have to say Anni, this one

have to say Anni, this one is growing on me with every read! perhaps it was just as Orgami says, a new feel! congrats on Spotlight hon, I know it's not what we're here for am v happy you, you and your work deserve it! Bring on the rock hugging then I can say I hugged rocks with her way back when! ;) much love b xx
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

I feel I grow & learn every post & am so grateful to the feedbac

Hey Cheshire faery... I soooo love that picture of you... I can just see you with your darling little one, frolicking among those amazing rocks. Ta so much for your support & congrats on spotlight, it is an honour, I know, to have the support of your peers, but I have so far felt a little undeserving considering the works that have been voted. There are so many great poets here on Neo... Sometimes I am really blown away by the brilliance I read & yet those don't seem to get the attention I feel they deserve. Still, I feel I grow & learn every post & am so grateful to the feedback & the lovely warmth I seem to be showered in, it is a joy to come visit you (in wonderland, young Alice!) x Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Forgot to say, ta for seeing/knowing these changes x

Oh forgot to say (above) Ta for seeing the change, it's kind of lovely having companions in your transitions to a better place, I did go through a lot of pain in the last few months here, can't help let it seep into my writing it's where it has always let itself free, but I am so relieved to be coming to a much freer & sweeter place again... back to ME how I am without the "ouch" (getting some skin on again phew!). I'm glad it is obvious in the work as well, even if there is sadness here, it is less dictating & bullying than the anguish of trying to let go of something that hurt so much & felt like it wasn't necessary. Hope that makes sense.. I think I've felt that sort of struggle in your work too... Something cruel in the sense of knowing you are better off out of a circumstance that isn't good for you, but somehow still longing for it to be redeemed, so you can be immersed in the beauty & love you had for the thing before it turned on you, or from you. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

These similarities give me heart! xx

I am so glad you are getting some skin on again and coming back to yourself! You are so right in what you recognise in my work, what we recognise in each others work! I have to say, while I'm here, that the lesson you were talking about with Gee about expressing your thoughts and feelings WHEN you feel them, is one I too have learnt. When Simon died we were not in touch, so I didn't find out until after it happened, it is only really now that i recognise just how lost I was at that time in my life, and I'll always regret him not knowing how much I loved him when he passed. ( I know he knows now though) but It means I tell the people I love in my life ALL the time just how i feel, not caring if I'm percieved as a 'suck' or a 'sap'! I actually think it's rather a brave way to live, making yourself vulnerable by putting your emotions/feelings out there (like what we do with our 'babies' here knid of), but as I can never know if there'll be another chance to say what it is i'm experiencing, i find openess and honesty is the only way I can now exist. I am not comparing our experiences Anni but the lessons, i guess, we have chosen to learn from them! These simlarities give me heart, give me strength. much love, your cheshire faery! b xx
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Arduinna

17 years 2 months ago

love this one, great

love this one, great imagery, and a hypnotic tempo!
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Arduinna (love that

Thanks Arduinna (love that name), glad you liked it. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
Seren

Seren

17 years 2 months ago

Anni

This is poignant .. Even more so for me after you painted a picture in words of the woman and children in one of you earlier posts .. You write so beautifully that I can picture all this in my mind .. Beautiful job .. Definatly going to read some more of your work I love this one ... Sincerely JayC (Jayne-Chloe)
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Thanks Jayne-Chloe, not sure

Thanks Jayne-Chloe, not sure what to say (don't write so Beautifully when I'm brain dead from lack of sleep). Ta for dropping in, I intend to visit more of yours soon also. Cheers. Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."
doorman

doorman

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Anni

After reading this a couple of times, I got the urge to bring the axe out and chop it in half. The two are gems by themselves, I thought (and still think). Why tie them up, why break the pattern? I reread and reread, and very happy I did. I found the thread. Thanks for making me look deeper, and challenge my conservative hiccups. Your lumberjack, Espen