Precious time

The slow disintegration of a mind, there isn't a worse fate of it's kind. The challenges multiply and combine, such desecration of the mental shrine. Knowing what she has had and now lost, finding acceptance for the unfair final cost. A strength glows from her weak frame, as she carry's with-in her so little blame. Watching the decline of a matriarch's reign, her family crippled with searing heart felt pain. So many Little holes, peppered like Swiss cheese, such a long, demeaning and debilitating disease.

Please lord help me understand this mercy,
share with the blind, so we all can plainly see.

Offer me hope for what ever may yet come to be
tell me how her everlasting soul will be set free.

For the pain of this is tearing us up inside,
we love her with our whole heart and Tabor pride.
Dear Mother, grandmother, and our valued friend,
we promise to stay with you to till the precious end.

Julie

D.D.

3/20/09
For Mother Tabor, we love you.

— DawningDaytripper, Mar 20, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

Critiques

Morgana Tragic…

17 years 2 months ago

Well, Julie, you already

Well, Julie, you already know from chat that I love this poem. It really hits home. I see this in my residents every day where I work, and it's just so sad to see them go like this. Thanks for sharing this one, it's one a lot of people can relate to. Peace and Love Katie

Baz

17 years 2 months ago

Precious time

Your poems tell stories and have emotion. People relate to stories and emotion as we all have similar experiences. I shall look forward to reading more of your work. Barry

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Julie, very heart breaking

What did you think of my title? The title was perfect. How was my language use? You language use was very very good. What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing? You got off rhythm a couple of places. corrections noted below. How does this theme appeal to you? The theme breaks my heart. thinking of my own mom's loss to the big C. How was the beginning/ending of the poem? The beginning and ending were very good. Is the internal logic consistent? The internal logic perfectly consistent. as she carry’s (carries) with-in her so little blame. her family crippled with searing heart felt pain. (off a little here, try: her family crippled with heart searing pain.) such a long, demeaning and debilitating disease. (off again here. try such a demeaning and debilitating disease.) Great write Julie. Very heart felt and sad. My prayers go out to you and yours. Respectfully, Rett: "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein For the sake of children, read this. http://www.neopoet.com/node/19905