One sinner's choice {Edited}

I walk on up and knocked on Satan's door, no sooner than that, I was tossed on the floor.So I stood back up as always, ready for more, when I heard a cynical voice I knew from before. "You come again, my brass and ignorant friend, don't you know it's a destiny you cannot mend.Not for you or yours, will the rules I rescind, but your sheer determination I can commend." "Your pleas are a worthless waste of my time, A deal has been made, it's now rightfully mine.Accept the truth because there is no rewind, you should find acceptance to quit and resign." Never will I stop, or can you scare me away I have come to retrieve what is mine this day.Not an evil thought I will let stand in my way, to take back my soul that you led astray. "I ask you, what could you offer to your evil lord, your eternal worth fell under your chosen sword. My price is more than you could possibly afford, you have nothing more to barter as a worthy reward." You know you speak lies and you mean to deceive, any sinner that comes seeking only has to believe.God offered me his trust and a last minute reprieve, forgiveness is more than you could know or conceive. So I stand at the gate and I command it to open, my being is worth more than any trinket or token,No matter the sins of flesh or those I have spoken, for with grace and divine love my faith was awoken. Julie D.D.
3/17/09

— DawningDaytripper, Mar 17, 2009

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Region, Country: Robe valley, WA, USA

Favorite Poets: All of them, for differant reasons. Neopoet poets have influenced me the most over the last 2 plus years. Great teachers. Edgar Allen Poe, Dickens, way to many to list...

Critiques

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

sinners' thank you

thank you for helping me remember that there is still hope for those who sin. that all is not lost forever. you just have to ask forgiveness and mean not to sin like that again. your rhyming ability is second to none, and i am very partial to rhymes. your poem was a delight to read. your comment about not fitting into a specific religious box was right on target with me. gee.

Sydonia

17 years 2 months ago

:D

I really liked this. Your ryhming is brilliant, it is a very instresting read

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Oh my! very good here.

Julie, I like the title although I would probably have name it "Conversation with Satan" I think "one Sinners Choice" is great! I love the way you did the conversation to differentiate the two parties of the talk. I really liked this a lot! As usyual, a few small suggestions. *S* Not for you or yours, will the rules I resend, (in this context resend, to send again, should be rescind-to take back) “Your plea’s (pleas) are worthless waste of my time, You know you speak lie’s (lies) and you mean to deceive, You are on a roll girl! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Ahh, much better Julie

Excellent work! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein