invisible voice

i see that you can't hear me.
i'm not understanding why.

the difference of us, of we,
makes me want to cry.

i scream so very loudly,
and still you do ignore.

you hold your head so proudly,
it makes me cry some more.

so, i make mistakes,
i'm not the perfect kind.

please give me a break,
i kinda lost my mind.

if you would only listen,
i think that you could see.

my eyes, the teardrops glisten,
just hear the voice of me.

it wasn't that i didn't care,
and harm i did not intend.

i really was not aware,
fences, i would mend.

please see my voice, just now.
please, see me, oh, please!

can we make this up somehow?
it sure would give me ease.

please, you must be forgiving.
you must make the choice.

if i am to go on living,
just hear my invisible voice.

— Geezer, Mar 16, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Critiques

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Ouchy one Gee, hope your not still feeling that one

Ouchy one Gee, hope your not still feeling that one, feel for you. It's dreadful when you want to clear something up & can't get through. seem the only thing you can do in that regard is cultivate patience & let your actions be your words, then step into love as much as you can in NAY way you can... I really do believe it comes back to love in most cases. Anyway great little flow of rhyming couplets my friend, not everyone can manage that, good job... Do you want to get your typo's or shall I just suggest you have another read? (I know I so often miss them until they are posted... I find this editting font harder to pick things up in for some reason), There's nothing hideous, "you" is repeated in about the 7th couplet I think. Great to see you writing Good luck xx see you in the blue Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

ouchey is very fresh.

fixed double you. anything else? yes, still feeling it. it is very fresh! i let a difference of opinion get out of hand the other nite, on the chat. i jumped to defend an idea, took sides, and only when paul appeared did i realize where i was and that we were waaaaay out of line. i tried to smooth things over, but it didn't work. for by that time two others had progressed to the point of no return. i have been trying to make an apology to all through this poem. i normally don't engage in this sort of behavior, and am very ashamed. i am feeling ostracized on the chat. seems like when i show up, anyone who witnessed our battle, suddenly has something else to do. i can only hope that my poem will show how very sorry i am. grounded from the skies of neopoet by the fog of carelessness, where i have been so free to fly, would be a ghastly fate. gee.

Cloudthings

17 years 2 months ago

Do hope you can sort it & make amends

Well, hopefully if you are genuinely sorry & want to make the difference & take responsibility for yourself that will come across, & I believe the kind of people here generally will be big enough to manage forgiveness & learn from it.. good on you for trying. I can't seem to manage any chats, never been anything going on when I've looked, & I don't have the extra time anyway, want to be reading & responding to these great works here... Rather fly in the free skies of Neopoets. I DO hope you can sort it out or it will settle soon. Cheers Anni "Out beyond the ideas of wrongdoing and rightdoing, there is a field. I will meet you there. When the soul lies down in that grass, the world is too full to talk about ideas, language, and even the phrase, "each other" doesn't make any sense."

Knuckles

17 years 2 months ago

Kudos again

Beautiful, I can totally relate to this one right now, sure you weren't diggin' around in my head writing this one? It puts into words about how I've been feeling lately towards someone, no names need to be mentioned, I'm sure you know. Right now I am the invisible voice. Again, kudos, very moving.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Gee

Slowly slowly I creep around neopoet reading what I have yet to read LOL and found this one .... OK right now I dont have the time but later tonight I am coming back to this one I feel that with a little work it could be a stunner will have a tweak of it if you dont mind ? and come back to you, there is something in my mind wont let go and when it does that it meens its a good thing LOL ... really glad you got this off your chest and can see it was a sensitive subject so will wait for your reply before I go tearing through your poem lol well not tearing,gently poking around with it that sounds better Much love Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 11 months ago

Invisible voice

No, I don't mind a bit. It is something done and over a while back. I have such great regard for your talent, that I would be pleased to have you tweak this one for me. This is why I am here, to become a better poet. Well, not the only reason, but one of the biggest. Go right ahead and tweak it up. Looking forward to seeing what you have for me. ~ Gee.

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Went to bed and realised I

Went to bed and realised I had forgotten again to put the poem I had had tweaked for you see what you think if you like I can show you some more changes I would suggest ... Love Jayne x x Seeing you can’t hear me. And I cant understand why. The difference of us,of we, makes me want to cry. Screaming so loud, and still you ignore. You hold your head proudly, it makes me cry more. So,I've make mistakes, I'm no the purest kind. Please give me a break, I've kinda lost my mind. If you would only listen, I think that you would see. My eyes,and teardrops glisten, just hear the voice in me. It wasn’t that I didn’t care, and harm I did not intend. I really wasn't aware, knowing now,fences,I would mend. Please hear my voice now. please, see me, I plead! Can we make this up? I'd like to appease. Please, try to be forgiving. you must make the choice. If I am to go on living, hear my invisible voice.