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wrecking the temple

i've destroyed what the gods have given me,
through  misdeeds and accidents.

the one thing i must have missed out on,
is a little common sense.

i wasted all my youthfulness.
i shook the dew drops from the bloom.

my strength is gone and wilted,
i feel ready for the tomb.

too many times, too often
i took the pleasures from the day.

without the thought or idea,
i might sometime...... have to pay.

the motorcycle that i rode,
sans helmet on my head.

has dumped me on the street
and left me almost dead.

all the smoke that filled my lungs,
the weed that was so sweet,

has made my coughing leave my face,
redder than a beet.

i'm now on two inhalers,
and all too numerous pills.

but, i continue getting out of bed
in spite of all my ills.

i want to live just one more day
i think, each and every dawn.

but soon, there will come the time,
when i have nothing left to pawn.

it hasn't been all bad, i guess.
been touched by so many lives,

but when dr. death comes looking,
i've moved, no forwarding address.

no, i'm not about to go,
at least it's not just yet !!!!

i've still got tricks up my sleeve,
i'm a foe he's not yet met.














— Geezer, Mar 14, 2009

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Glad 'you're' not me

Glad you're not me, the you in this poem, I hope it isn't you? I enjoyed the rhythm of this piece and the awful story. I suppose you don't care about punctuation, so I will not comment on that!! In line ...."too many times, so often" I would prefer , too often "It hasn't been all bad, I'd guess" I would prefer , I guess plain and simple as it seems a little out of context with the I'd. I don't know what others think? Yours having fun on the ride Ann of Norway.
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

i guess- puncuation

i thought that your comments had some validity and tried to clean up my puncuation and replace the word 'so' with 'too' as it was my first choice anyhoo! yes, it is me, but as i said "i'm not about to go just yet"! i guess that i made it sound like i am on my death bed. not so. if i behave reasonably well i still have a good bit of time. thanks for your concern. gee.
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

keep living

i'm planning on it! thank you for the kind comments.
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

thinking inversion

i am thinking about inverting the two lines.[it hasn't been all bad i guess,and been touched by so many lives.] what think you?
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Oh now it rocks!

With the swing of a row of sweeps the round corners of the roads in Norway (there are many!). The Danish motorcyclists were asked why they came to holiday in Norway, and they replied because there are so many wonderful corners to swing round!!!! Your poem swings too now, good show Geezer. Yours Ann of Norway
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

rocking

thank you sooo much! it made me feel so much better to come back to this, what i would consider high praise from you. i had a bad attack of glacoma last night and today and this was a soothing balm to my soul. i feel better now and this has helped to ease away the remaining pain. thanks again ann.