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If I.....

If I could fly it would be

like a bird

to glide on the thermals 

up high in the blue,

be tossed by the four winds

and soothed by my seashore kin,

to see all the world

in one

like the sun;

be rained on, be hailed on

be driven to hide,

in bushes, in fir trees

in snow;

but I'm only human 

and live on the ground

so how could I ever know

if I

could fly?

 

In the next life maybe

it will be the norm

to go flying about like ghosts;

or to join the chorus

of angels, 

and take part in the 

heavenly hosts

I doubt they exist.

so don't get so pissed

It was only a thought I had now,

and its all make-believe 

anyhow.

 

If I didn't exist

it would be like the fist

of those pruned trees 

in Amsterdam

angrily growing new beards

as you watch

and when they're cut of

I would scream

in their dream;

but then I am not 

a tree in a pot

of concrete aside on the path

I'll die of exhaust

and my leaves will

fall off,

and all that is left 

is an

aftermath. 

 


— Nordic cloud, Mar 13, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Kailashana

Kailashana

17 years 2 months ago

“all that is left is an

"all that is left is an aftermath". mmmmmm. so many mmmmmm's in this poem Anna of Norway... I think we are all birds in disguise...(I know I'm a Bird of Paradise. ;-)) We're dreams, we're thoughts of dreams, we're trees and branches where time sits and waits. In an another reality what is has already come to pass... and will never be... or be yet again... Hug. ~A "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho
C

Conect11

17 years 2 months ago

hey Ann,

ah, the questions that we ponder from time to time! Perhaps if our bones were hollow like the birds, then maybe we could fly. A couple of minor grammatical errors, ie., ok, the first might not be grammatical, but repeating "wind" as the last work two lines in a row feels a touch ackward, perhaps one of those could be "air?" Ok, that's about it, the poem itself is dreamy, and I love it. (well, other than the part about doubting angels, hey, we all have our differences of opinion, lol!) I really did love this poem, though. You have such a way of storytelling that draws the reader in. Oh, sorry this is all so scattershot, but your description of the trees in Amsterdam, brilliant! Mark W. "our hope is in the living God, who is the Savior of all people and particularly of all believers." 1 Timothy 4:10
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Hei Marko

Being a so-called old lady I am definitely glad that my bones are not hollow, or crumbling away like my mothers. The winds in the sky seem to be different from the winds off the shore-where the sea gulls fly, I felt I had to bring in the sea, but thank you for saying that you find it repetitive; I will ponder a change. Yes we differ as to what "is", but life is full of variety, thanks to our imaginative consciousness that it gives spice to our lives. I do not discriminate, except those who discriminate others. We all get to sing our own songs and I think ultimately do the same dance without knowing it. Yours Ann of Norway
Geezer

Geezer

17 years 2 months ago

winds

i agree with mark about the winds thing, but like him, i too loved the image of the trees growing beards. almost like a husband or boyfriend letting a beard grow in defiance of a spouse, as a sign of protest. as to the angels, i don't think you really meant that you don't believe in them, only a somewhat defiant thought of your own like a child saying "i hate you" to a parent. anyhow, great write. gee.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

No I don't believe in angels

That's why I put "so don't get so pissed." They are make-believe. But I do believe in some people behaving like angels, their mythical imaginative shining graciousness is worth attempting to emulate. The last two lines are not spaced as I had them, not my fault, this site stretches and shapes things as it wishes against our wishes, or is it Windows, I do not have such on my mac. One of my poems I sent centred and put it here centred twice, and it still ended up all escaped to the left, not as I wanted it. I cannot steer this Windows car? Help. The shore rhymes with four so I shall have to do something else with it, any suggestions? I shall do something. Those blooming capital letters for the little egoistic "I" it creates a lot of going in reverse gear, perhaps the most, and I like to go forward. But thank goodness we don't have to make all the accents that the French and Swedes do, among others, that's a terrific handicap. If I could I would send you a rose for 'straightening' my poem, I would, and you will, all of you, I hope be responsible for giving it the perfume of a rose, the angelic aura it needs, although come to think of it its not such a poem anyway. I always feel sorry for those trees with their fists. Then one looks at the many weeping (hengebjerke) birches swaying their long fronds in the breezes, sometimes several metres long. Thank you all and yours Ann of Norway.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

My beautiful sunset girl, thank you

I have done as your dear ladyship suggested and changed it to your seashore kin, and far out there in your 'portrait' I can 'sea' why! Thank you dawn of Washington, can you see the sea nearby? I am not very good at the map of America, we didn't have it at school. Did you take the photograph? I have a whole collection of sunsets from my 'in'famous view. Oh golly that was a mouthful for a mac user, I am not at home in the PC world, now I am sorry I am all screwed up instead! I must have a go though, if I am capable. You have been brought up with this computer jargon and I was not, as I didn't have one until 2000. But my Erik had the first mac, that little upright one, we still have it. Thank goodness things have become quicker and easier since then. My thanks to you from Ann of Norway
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Oh you paint such a picture Julie

I am now an explorer in your country as you have painted the area with even the addition of the birdsong, so I can hear it too, all so exciting and probably exotic for me. Because when you say for instance, robin, you mean something quite different from our unassuming little red breast, probably so with the others, but we do have many birds of prey and the eagles too, I have never seen a vulture, except in a Zoo. Snoqualmie sounds ?? What does it stand for? Indian country, my Uncle Philip lived in Manitoba, Canada and met the Native Americans often on his sailing trips on the big lakes out there, I never forget him telling me about an Indian who took five eggs threw each across the room into the frying pan and then swallowed the sixth whole. That was at his house. Oh its my poem we have here!! I got carried away in your descriptions, thank you again. Ann N.D.D. I can use them after my name but never have, = National Diploma of Design. An 'ancient' thing from the 1960's!
Janice Pearce

Janice Pearce

17 years 2 months ago

If I

One of my fantasies is to fly and this has captured the feeling for me. Nicely written Ann. I have flown in a plane, helicopter, bi-plane and now with you Ann~ Thanks for your impulsiveness~[Not sure about those bushes] ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Birds LOVE bushes

and I am so devastated when "they" cut more copses and bushes, in country and town, as it is there that one of our little European staples the Sparrow likes to live, he/she they, are diminishing in numbers and that's alarming. He is suddenly there, anywhere, bobbing about having dust baths or just hopping, or perched in the gutters just above your window cheep-cheep- cheeping all day long. There are a little gatherings of sparrows outside the big central library here in Oslo, along the row of tight bushes in front, I look at them in the -10%C and wonder how their tiny bodies can stand the cold and where do they hide at night? And pray that "they" don't cut the bushes and leave them nowhere to keep warm. That is why I said bushes as I likened myself to a bird. Sparrow was Piaf's nickname too. Thanks for the comment Janice. Yours Ann
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

Dear Janice

I am flattered and pleased that you should bestow on me such an honour, I must say something to you as you have been dancing with us and I haven't yet asked you to dance with me. Shame on me. I am glad you enjoyed flying with me, where shall we fly next? Thank you and good wishes from Ann
Rett

Rett

17 years 2 months ago

Ann, you have outdone yourself

if that is possible for you. Words cannot express the beauty and imagery this e vokes in my mind. It is odd, I have flown in crop dusters (crazy pilots) commercial jets (they bother me) and helicopters (which I hate with a passion (life flight three times). I never had the nerve to try a hang glider or to parachute. Jumping from a perfectly good airplane always seemed a bit crazy to me. It is funny though, I have ridden roller coaster, cliff drops, tramways etc, but what scares me spitless is a Ferris Wheel. Absolutely terrifies me. I digress though. To soar like bird and to ride the thermals, oh my, that would be glorious! Respectfully, Rett: "Next time you think you're perfect, walk on water." "A Democracy can withstand anything but Democrats." Robert A. Heinlein
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

17 years 2 months ago

It was your idea Rett?

You who mentioned an "If I" beginning and that's what came as I so love to feel as if I am flying. The closest perhaps has been when skiing and soaring across the snowfields, wait yes, I once climbed a mountain on skis, not something I would recommend, we almost needed the furs under our skis as they did in the old days. At the top the wind sun and storms had smoothed the snow to an ice cap, we had to crawl along on all fours. BUT THEN:- there were all those mountains of the Hardanger Vidda wonderful, ranged around the whole view and then the smooth side of the mountian, facing the winds, the sun shone, all was white, there were some grouse in their Winter white that took off as we passed, he went down first creating a most beautiful curving spray of white behind him, I followed as if in a magic dream down the whole mountian ooooooh ........I cannot describe the feeling it was so wonderful. If I had been born in Norway I would have ski jumped as they do now, the women too for the first time. Now I shall dream that I am flying as I am off to bed and wish you sweet dreams too. Perhaps you will fly Rett? Then you shouldn't be afraid. I wouldn't hesitate to take over a little plane if only I had been able to fly one. Good night to one and all from Ann of Norway
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

17 years 2 months ago

If I

Ann I am the Blue Bird. I am often up in the clouds do I fly with my heart so light I take flight. I travel from the UK to the USA often and I just love being up in the clouds I always insist on a window seat cannot sleep too much as I have to see the changing colours they send me off to distant horizons where I melt and blend within the colours night or day. I am the ghost of past and present and hopefully the future too. I drift to places that hold my soul and wait to recapture the rapture of my heart and soul. I love walking the woods forests on the mountains and across the open moors trees should be in the earth to drink from natural springs not set in concrete to die letting sad tears fall so alone below not even being able to fall into the soft brown earth below to rejoin the oceans in the circle of life. Thank you my friend Electric Blue