Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Five Minds Think Alike

As my companion and I were close to finishing our travels,
not very far, mind you.....but a distance, just the same;
we spoke briefly, about our final destination.

We paused and wondered in our first minds, which pathway should direct us
and help bring our quest to a conclusion, on this day,
as we had before us, two roads from which to choose.

One stretch of the highway was rather barren in appearance
and the other one was quite lovely, to say the least.
Plus, we could see our final "point B", from both of our choices of "point A's".

So, we then began trading dialog, as to which avenue would better serve our needs,
as time was very much a factor, and of the essence.
Briefly, we challenged one another about this very dilemma.

Our collective first minds told us to take the worn path to the left,
for it's condition lent towards the thought of usage.
But, our second minds saw that the other trail was rather quite pleasant, and led straight to our destination.

I would even venture to say, that it was attractive to even all of the senses;
and in addition, it was very straight and did not meander,
leading our third minds to believe it would also be kind to our coach, as we made our way.

We were coaxed on, by our fourth minds, to not only  consider this avenue.....but, to indulge it's way...
for the sands in the hour-glass were flowing swiftly enough,
motivating our collective fifth minds, to dilly, not.....and to dally, less.....and to just plain.....carry on.

Our conversation was pleasant enough, as we traveled,
and our eyes drank in the the majesty of mother nature's handiwork.
Furthermore, our third minds were correct about the ease as to which our coach could handle the road.

But suddenly, our itinerary fell greatly beyond our grasp,
as we came upon an unscheduled stop, that was really, quite necessary;
for looming in front of us, our most appealing second-choice road.....had turned into a dead-end.

Gone, was our precious time-frame,
and gone, were our hopes of securing our destination on schedule,
and within the scheduled time-frame, of which I speak.

But, what spoke to our second minds, since our first minds were rather overwhelmed at the situation,
was that our destination was still, clearly in our view...
taunting us ever so childishly, yet brazenly waving to us, so as to point out our error.

Realistically we knew, that it was meant that we turn around, and back-track.
But, so discouraged were we to lose such a precious element as time, to a schedule,
that it was then, that our third minds took over.....and we did just what we had to do.

With our tails between our legs, and throwing caution to the wind, we returned to our former "point A".
We then, traveled the more visually worn out first road, in an awkward, quiet silence.....
 as our fourth mind reminded us to digest what had just transpired.

For our actions had taught us something most worthy of a completely shattered schedule.
We had decided, and were allowed.....to travel the more beautiful, "road less traveled", and had fallen short of the goal;
however, our fifth mind was quite kind in pointing out for us.....that, we were of the few to have traveled.....both.


— docmaverick, Mar 12, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

More from this author

Critiques

faerybeki

faerybeki

17 years 2 months ago

There is so much about this

There is so much about this poem that i like, the theme, the 5 minds really resonated with me, as there are times i'm sure i have a team meeting going on in my head!! I love the ending, good old 5th mind for reminding you of the positives!! I did however find it quite hard work, perhaps due to it's length and because it strikes me as a bit prose like, maybe just a different style than i'm used to reading but was glad i persevered! take care b x
AW

Antoinette Mar…

17 years 2 months ago

It was a little more hard work ....

to actually get to where you were going with this write...however an enjoyable trip. I too agree that I can always have at least two or three team meetings going on...not sure of having five....but alas a wonderful write to enjoy with all of the teams!! Thank you Doc....you make even a dead end interesting.........
docmaverick

docmaverick

17 years 2 months ago

Antoinette & my faery....

...I must say that I was delighted to read feedback from the both of you. Now, having said that...I must add that this was a different sort of project for me. What I did was, "play" off of the previous line, not even knowing where I was going with it. Crazy? Yes. A monumental "tool", or "excercise"? Yeah. (Priceless). Try it some time. It'll make or break you. Thanks again, for reading my "dribble", and taking the time to comment. It's greatly appreciated, because it's really....."all good". Later..... #{:>{)]@=== docmaverick.