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My feels on you

Heaven is not more than your love
It is just equal to your smile
Lotus is not so beauty to your face
It is just litlle bit beauty in a day
Angels
I want when i feel lonely to spend a day
You only beyond my love
You only be there in my world of romance
You only my queeen to love and live
Your black or forty will not come to my eyes
your shadow with lovely eyes  enough
to spend my remaining days with glee
Pray
to born again as lovers in this earth and
Pray
to die in the same second in this world
                        
SAKTHI S RAVICHANDRAN
— SAKTHEEE2007, Mar 11, 2009

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yenti

yenti

17 years 2 months ago

Sakkthee

This is once again a lovely poem ,and again it is the structure of each sentence that spoils the whole thing, as I have done with two of your works, where I have copied and pasted onto notepad, then taken two lines or so at a time, and written them again underneath, to sort our the flow or the wording, for you I feel is just the way of writing but the reading is a little different, Yours Ian.T